Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The overweight rate in nine countries from 1970 to 2020 are given in the following graph.Where it shows USA at the top of the list while Korea at the bottom.However,USA was not a struggling country as its start in 1980 was much more afficient as compare to other countries having a very low rate.Korea came in to the graph near 2000s.While, the other countries in cluding Austrailia and France were having a ratio of 35 and 30 in 1990.Italy started in 1995 with a ratio of 38 percent.Spain also struggled alot and came into the graph in 1985 having a quite ratio of 43 percent.England almost competed USA but failed to get on the top of graph.Canada was also in the list by 1995 with 50 percent.If we compare these stats with 2020 rates, USA is on the top of list as same in 1980.However, the other countries increased their rates by 10 to 15 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad pattern that the USA is highest and Korea lowest, and you include several country figures. However, the response only minimally summarises the graph: it gives no clear overview of the overall rise across countries and does not systematically compare the past with the projections. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the USA begins at about 45% in 1972, not at a rate in 1980 that was especially low; Australia and France are not both around 35% in 1990 (Australia is about 34%, while France’s data begin later); and Spain’s first shown point is around 1987. The claim that other countries rose by 10–15 percentage points is too broad. Select the main trends and support them with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a loose chronological sequence, moving from the countries’ starting points to their 2020 figures, and linking expressions such as “However” and “If we compare” show an attempt to connect ideas. Nevertheless, the information is not arranged into a clear overview followed by organised comparisons, so the reader has to work out the main message. Several transitions are awkward or incomplete, including “Where it shows USA at the top” and “While, the other countries…”. The repeated country-by-country statements also do not build a clear progression. Grouping countries by high, middle and low rates, then using a separate overview, would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant terms, including “overweight rate,” “ratio,” “percent,” and “increased,” and the country comparisons are generally understandable. However, the vocabulary is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “struggling” and “competed USA,” which describe the data as if countries were people or competitors. “Quite ratio” is unclear, while “afficient” and “in cluding” show spelling problems. Repetition of “list,” “rate,” and “graph” also limits precision. Use neutral reporting language such as “recorded,” “stood at,” “rose,” and “remained the highest,” and choose “percentage” or “proportion” consistently when describing the figures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences with contrast and comparison, for example, “If we compare these stats with 2020 rates…,” but the range is limited and complex constructions are often faulty. Subject–verb agreement is incorrect in “rates … are given” only if treated as singular? Here the plural subject requires “are,” but the sentence’s phrasing is awkward; more clearly, “USA … while Korea…” needs articles or clearer sentence structure. Other problems include “as its start in 1980,” “as compare to,” and the fragment-like opening “Where it shows…”. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops and commas. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then use controlled clauses such as “Although the USA remained highest, Korea had the lowest rate.”

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