Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph compares nine regions in terms of overweight rates between 1970 and 2020.

Overall, Nine countries experienced different trends over the time period. while, proportion of overweight saw a rapid upward trend for several coutries, few regions maintained a stable increase in overweight proportional rate with some fluctuations.

As the graph shows, In terms of USA , overweight proportion started with almost 48 % in 1973 followed by a fell to near 42% in 1978. Afterward, USA faced a massive skyrocket trends until it reaches to over the 73% in 2020. regarding the figure, England and Australia directly saw an upward trends without any fluctuation or fell over the time in overweight rates. England's Initial overweight rates were near 48 % in 1990 and final ratio reached to just below 70% in 2020, on the other hand, Australia similarly started with the figure of 33% in 1988 and ended with 64% approximately in 2020. On contrast, canada, spain, austria, italy, franch, korea tried their best to control overweight and saw some fluctuations in data but ultimately failed to maintain. some countries like italy , korea tries their best to keep their number steady trends but in the end they all had to ended up with a large number of overweight rates with the acceptence.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the overall upward direction and make relevant comparisons, particularly between the USA, England and Australia. Several figures are also broadly close to the chart, such as Australia ending at about 64% and the USA reaching roughly 74%. However, the overview is vague and partly inaccurate: the countries did not all show the same pattern, and England and Australia had some fluctuations rather than uninterrupted rises. The claim that countries “tried their best to control” rates is not supported by the graph, and the final comparison groups six countries together without reporting their distinct outcomes. To strengthen the response, give a clearer overview of the highest and lowest rates and select a few accurate comparisons across the remaining countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, beginning with an introduction and overview before moving to country details. Grouping the USA, England and Australia together gives the reader a useful starting point. However, progression becomes less clear in the final section, where Canada, Spain, Austria, Italy, France and Korea are compressed into broad claims rather than compared in a logical sequence. Linking expressions such as “on the other hand” and “on contrast” are sometimes awkward or do not clearly express the relationship between the data. The overview also contains a sentence fragment-like transition (“while, proportion…”). Organise the body into clearer groups—for example, higher-rate countries and lower-rate countries—and use linking phrases only when their relationship is precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary to describe change, including “upward trend,” “fluctuations,” “started” and “ended.” This shows some awareness of the language needed for a line graph. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow: “massive skyrocket trends,” “tried their best to control,” and “ended up with a large number … with the acceptence.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “coutries,” “franch” and “acceptence,” also reduce clarity. Prefer precise, neutral reporting language rather than personifying countries or using dramatic expressions. For example, describe a rate as rising, remaining relatively stable, or fluctuating, and use “proportion” or “percentage” consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including comparisons joined with “while” and “on the other hand.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb forms occur throughout. For example, “Overall, Nine countries…” has incorrect capitalisation, while “proportion of overweight saw” lacks a natural grammatical construction. In “England and Australia directly saw an upward trends,” the subject–verb and singular/plural forms do not agree. Punctuation also creates run-on sentences, especially in the long comparison beginning “regarding the figure.” Build accuracy by using shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses carefully; check articles, verb agreement and punctuation when editing.

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