Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given line graph illustrates the overweight rates of three timelines- past, present and future, of nine selected OECD countries from 1970 to 2020.

Overall, the overweight rate has gone up in all selected countries in a span of 5 decades with USA taking the first place and Korea in the last. All other countries also show considersble rise.

Among all the OECD countries the overweight rate in the USA has gone through significant rise from near 45% to 74% in 50 years period with a visible decline in 1980. Korea is the only country ending up with 35% rate of overweight people, starting with a rate of 25%. The rate in Australia shows a rapid rise in respect of other countries, although starting with a rate of 33%, the rate shows no decline and has risen upto around 62%.

The other six countries also demontrates visible ups and downs but ultimate rate shows a rise compared to their initial rate.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad pattern accurately: rates rise overall, the USA finishes highest at about 74%, and Korea remains lowest at around 35%. The USA’s early dip and Australia’s sustained increase are also relevant details. However, the overview is too general to show the main comparisons across all nine countries, and the final paragraph merely says that six countries had “ups and downs” without identifying which trends or endpoint differences matter. Some figures are also imprecise: Australia ends at about 64%, rather than around 62%, and its starting point is about 34%. To strengthen the report, compare more of the countries’ final rates and highlight notable contrasts, such as the USA’s lead and Korea’s much lower level, while supporting the overview with selected accurate details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a separate overview, and two detail paragraphs. The progression from the general pattern to the USA, Korea and Australia, then the remaining countries, is easy to follow. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “Among all,” and “although” help signal relationships. This organisation is effective, but the final paragraph is too brief and vague to develop the comparison it introduces; “the other six countries” also leaves the reader to infer which countries are being grouped. For stronger progression, organise the details into meaningful groups—for example, higher and lower rates—and use specific country names and comparisons. This would make the cohesion more precise rather than relying on broad references.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “gone up,” “significant rise,” “visible decline,” and “rapid rise.” These choices make the main direction of change understandable, and the response generally communicates its meaning clearly. However, some wording is imprecise or repetitive: “rate” appears frequently, while “three timelines” does not accurately describe past, present and projected data. There are also spelling errors, including “considersble” and “demontrates,” and some collocations are awkward, such as “ending up with 35% rate.” Aim for more precise chart language and vary expressions for increases and levels. For instance, describe a country’s rate as “reaching” or “standing at” a figure, and use “projected” when referring to future data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and several sentences communicate their meaning clearly, such as “Korea is the only country ending up with 35% rate of overweight people, starting with a rate of 25%.” The contrast introduced by “although” in the Australia sentence also shows an attempt to vary structure. Some grammatical errors remain, but they rarely prevent understanding. For example, “the overweight rate has gone up” shifts to the singular despite referring to rates across countries, and “The other six countries also demonstrates” has a subject–verb agreement error. Phrases such as “in 50 years period” also need an article. Review agreement and article use, and check that each sentence’s subject is clear before choosing its verb.

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