Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given line graph shows the currect and forecastes overweight rate in nine OECD countries.

As per the demonstrated data, the USA has the highest share, past as well as projected. Before the year 2000, Korea had the least share at 25%. The proportion is expected to increase to 35% by 2020, but Korea will still have the lowest number. Where we see Spain and Canada with a higher proportion (45-50%) between 1990 and 2000 and Australia below 40%, by 2020 the latter is projected to surpass the former 2, taking third place in overall ranking. England is expected to, also, increase its overweight proportion from 47% in 1990 to ~70% in 2020. France, Italy and Austria are also expected to increase their shares in the coming decades.

The overall trend shows that overweight proportions will increase multi-fold across these OECD nations in 2020 compared to 1970. The United States of America is expected to take the top spot, followed by England and Australia.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: the USA remains highest, Korea remains lowest, and the rates generally rise. The overview also correctly places England and Australia behind the USA by 2020. This meets the task well, with some features developed through comparisons, such as Australia overtaking Spain and Korea’s projected rise. However, a few details are unclear or imprecise: “Before the year 2000, Korea had the least share at 25%” refers to its 1998 figure, while the graph’s earlier years are not shown for Korea; and Spain and Canada are grouped as having 45–50% between 1990 and 2000, although Canada’s plotted data begin in 1994 and reach about 50%. The account also gives little detail on the middle-ranking countries. More precise, selective comparisons would strengthen coverage further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall shape: an opening, a paragraph describing selected countries, and a concluding overview. The progression from the highest and lowest rates to comparisons among other countries is generally easy to follow. However, some links between ideas are awkward or unclear. “Where we see Spain and Canada…” does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence, and “the latter” is ambiguous because it could refer to either country. The phrase “surpass the former 2” also interrupts the flow and makes the comparison difficult to interpret. The final paragraph repeats the ranking already stated rather than adding a distinct summary. Use clearer references and organise the body around high, middle and low rates to make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “share,” “projected,” “overall ranking” and “top spot.” These choices help communicate trends and comparisons, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “currect and forecastes” contains spelling errors, “demonstrated data” is not a natural way to introduce a graph, and “increase multi-fold” is imprecise for the changes shown. “The latter” is also an unsuitable choice where the referent is unclear. Aim for standard graph language and precise trend verbs, and check spelling carefully. This would make the vocabulary more accurate and flexible without needing unnecessarily elaborate expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex structures, including “Before the year 2000, Korea had the least share…” and the sentence comparing Spain, Canada and Australia. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical and punctuation problems reduce control. In “Where we see Spain and Canada…,” the opening clause is incomplete in this context; it would be clearer as a complete statement. “England is expected to, also, increase…” has misplaced commas, and “compared to 1970” does not fit smoothly with the claim about rates in 2020. The sentence beginning “The overall trend shows…” also shifts between a general trend and a specific year without clear framing. Use complete clauses, place adverbs without unnecessary commas, and keep time comparisons grammatically explicit.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.