Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph compares the rates of past and current overweight in nine selected countries. Each country shows different variations based on the proportion of overweight rates.

There was a sharp increase in the market of USA which jumped from 45% in 1970 to 75% in 2020. The market of UK showed fluctuations from 1990 to 2005 but then it grew to 69%. There was a steady fall in the market of Canada till 2000 but then it rose gradually to mere 55%. In 1986, the proportion was 43% but it ended on 55% in 2019. The market of Austria didn't grow much as it ended on 46% from 39%. Italy had a balanced market at the start but it grew a bit and touched 45%. There was a rapid growth in the market of Australia and starting from 31% in 1990, it reached 64% in 2020. France showed rise and fall in it's rate but ended on 45%. The market of Korea rose steadily and ended on mere 35%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the graph’s general subject and report several end values, including the USA at about 75%, Australia at 64%, and Korea at 35%. However, the response gives no clear overview of the main pattern across the nine countries, and several details are inaccurate or confused. Canada did not fall steadily until 2000; it fluctuated slightly before rising to about 55%. The 43% figure belongs to the USA around 1972, not a country beginning in 1986, and Australia started at about 34%, not 31%. Spain is omitted, while England is called the UK. The repeated “market” descriptions also obscure what the data show. Select the highest and lowest trends, summarise the overall rise, and report accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response moves through several countries in sequence, so the reader can follow a basic list of observations. However, it lacks a clear overall progression: there is no distinct overview, and the country-by-country details are crowded into one paragraph. The Canada sentence is especially confusing because it first describes a fall and then introduces “In 1986” without clearly identifying the country or linking the figure to the preceding point. Repeated openings such as “The market of…” make the account feel like a list rather than a connected summary. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and grouped details—for example, the highest-rising countries and those ending at lower rates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant trend vocabulary, including “sharp increase,” “steady fall,” “fluctuations,” and “rose steadily,” and the meaning is generally recoverable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeatedly or inaccurately applied. “Market” is not an appropriate term for overweight rates, and “balanced market” does not clearly describe Italy’s figures. “Mere 55%” and “mere 35%” are also awkward choices in this context, while “touched 45%” is less precise than standard graph language. Use vocabulary that names the measure and describes movement accurately, such as “proportion,” “rate,” “increased,” “remained stable,” and “reached.” This would make the comparisons clearer and more suitable for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

Most sentences communicate a basic trend, and you use both simple statements and some joined clauses, such as “The market of UK showed fluctuations … but then it grew to 69%.” However, sentence structures are repetitive, and control is uneven. The opening, “Each country shows different variations,” is awkwardly formed, while “starting from 31% in 1990, it reached 64%” has an unclear subject reference. The sentence beginning “In 1986” is also difficult to connect grammatically to the preceding Canada information. There are errors in possessive punctuation in “it’s rate” and in article use in “the market of UK.” Aim for clearer subject–verb links and vary sentence patterns while checking punctuation and articles.

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