Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the proportion overweight of past and projected future rates in nine selected OECD countries from

1970 to 2020.

Overall, USA stood the highest numbers that maintain a substantial increased similar to England and Australia. A slight increase for other countries like Canada, Spain and Austria. You can also noticed that USA former it in 1970 then latter with other countries in 1980.

USA recorded at 45% in 1970 and consistently increased to 75% in 2020. Similar pattern to England and Australia where they started 1990 former 48% and 33%, latter 60% and 65%, respectively. Other countries like Italy, Austria, Korea rose slightly.

In 1970, people that are overweight are already recorded in USE then followed by Austria in 1980. Most country recorder their proportion overweight in 1990 and started to increased in 2000 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a broad overview that the USA is highest and several countries rise, which is relevant. However, the overview is incomplete and some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: the USA does not simply remain highest throughout, since England is close to it by 2019, and the claim that Canada, Spain and Austria show only a “slight increase” overlooks more substantial rises in Spain and Canada. The body gives only a few figures and omits important contrasts, especially the lower rates in Korea and France. Some details are also misreported, such as England’s starting figure and the claim that Austria was recorded in 1980. The response is 139 words, below the required 150, and needs fuller, more accurate coverage of the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and it attempts to group countries by trend. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is weak: the final paragraph repeats the opening-year information rather than adding a clear comparison, and the sequence “former” and “latter” is difficult to follow. Connections between ideas are often missing or mechanical, while “Overall” and “In 1970” do not resolve the unclear relationships between statements. To improve, organise the body around meaningful comparisons—for example, the highest-rising countries versus those with lower rates—and use clear references and linking phrases so each paragraph develops the overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “increased,” “recorded” and “similar pattern,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward: “stood the highest numbers,” “maintain a substantial increased,” and “former it” are not natural ways to describe the data. “People that are overweight are already recorded” is also imprecise for a graph showing proportions. Repetition of “countries,” “increased” and “recorded” further limits flexibility. Aim for accurate trend language such as “rose steadily,” “remained comparatively low,” and “reached,” and check that each phrase describes a rate rather than people themselves.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, including “Similar pattern to England and Australia where they started…” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, which sometimes makes the intended meaning hard to follow. For example, “A slight increase for other countries” is a fragment, while “You can also noticed” has an incorrect verb form. There are also problems with agreement and tense in “USA stood the highest numbers that maintain” and “Most country recorder their proportion.” The final paragraph’s sentence structure is particularly difficult to interpret. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and consistent past-tense reporting, then use a few controlled complex sentences to compare countries accurately.

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