Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates overweight rates in past and current time in nine countries, USA, England, Canada, Spain, Austria, Itlay, Australia, France and Korea.

Overall, the past and future projected rates are increasing from 1970 to 2020.However, the USA has the largest rates and, Korea has the lowest rates in all countries.

Moving to the details, the USA has about 44% rates then its dropped to 42%. After this rates rose to 50% and surged to 62% in half of 2000. In 2010,it reached 70%, which further rose 75% in the end of 2020. In England, its started from 1990 and reached 55% in the near of 1990, its rose 59% and fell 58% which rose at 62% and reached 69% in the end of 2010. The canada, had 45% rates in 2000 and reached above 63% in the near of 2020. Spain had constant rates tilll 2000, after this its fell to 47% and steady constat more than 50% in 2020. The Austria, itlay and, france had a lagre number of flucutuations, these had 43%,42% and 41% near to 2020. Austrila, had 43% in mid of 1990, then soared to 45% in 2000 an , reached 63% in 2020, third country with largest rate. The Korea, had lowest rate, its increased from 25% to 30% and reached 33% in the mid of 2010, which futher rose to 35% in the 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern of rising rates and correctly note that the USA is highest and Korea lowest by the end of the period. Several figures are also broadly accurate, such as the USA reaching about 70% in 2010 and Korea rising from roughly 25% to 35%. However, the overview is too general and some key comparisons are missing. The claim that Korea has the lowest rate “in all countries” is not supported across the whole period, and Australia is described as reaching 63% in 2020, whereas the chart shows about 64%; more importantly, Canada is said to exceed 63%, although it is around 55%. Spain’s trend and the figures for Austria, Italy and France are also unclear or inaccurate. Select the main highs, lows and contrasting trends, and report them precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an opening, an overview and a detail paragraph, and it generally moves from the USA and England to other countries. This gives the reader some basic organisation. However, the progression within the detail paragraph is difficult to follow because many countries are compressed together, and some statements are repeated or unclear. For example, the discussion of Austria, Italy and France is followed by a separate Australia description, making the country sequence confusing. Linking phrases such as “After this” and “Moving to the details” are used, but connections between comparisons are limited, while “its” is repeatedly used without a clear reference. Group countries by similar rates or trends, and use clearer transitions and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant trend vocabulary, including “rose,” “dropped,” “surged,” “fluctuations” and “lowest rate,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, sometimes making the data difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “in the near of 1990,” “constant rates,” “a lagre number of fluctuations” and “third country with largest rate” do not express the intended comparisons naturally. Spelling errors, including “Itlay,” “Austrila” and “flucutuations,” are also noticeable. Use precise language for approximate dates and values, and check country names and common collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to combine ideas and describe changes over time, but sentence structures are mostly simple, and errors occur frequently enough to make some relationships unclear. Examples include “then its dropped,” “In England, its started,” and “which further rose 75%,” where verb forms or sentence construction are faulty. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “The canada” and “The Austria,” while punctuation is often missing after full stops or commas. The long sentence listing several countries contains fragments and unclear links. Practise accurate past-tense reporting, subject–verb agreement and complete sentence boundaries; then add a few controlled complex sentences to compare trends.

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