Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the overweight rates of the countries in past and future.

Overall, United States was the fist one to be on overweight rates in the year on 1970 and gradually went up than other countries till the year of 2020 whereas Korea was on the below list than all.

USA was the first one to be introduced for overweight in 1970 at 45% and kept increasing with with time. Australia was the second country being overweight in the year of 1980 at the percentage of 39, going up steadily 45% in the year of 2020. England and Spain was at almost same percentage around 48% and 42% respectively while Australia and France being together too. France was at 30% and Australia was at 32% however, Australia had a good increase from the mid year of 1990 till 2020 by 64% whereas France only went till 43% in the year of 2020.

Furthermore, Italy started in the mid year of 1990 at 35% and had skow progress till 2010 but after that had a drastic change and went up by 45% and maintained that till 2020. Korea whereas started with Italy but had lower percentage of 25 but it gradually rose by going till 35%. At last, Canada was at 50% and had slow progress only till 55% in the year of 2020 and started before 2000

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad upward trend and note that the USA is highest while Korea remains lowest, which are relevant main features. However, several details are inaccurate or unclear: Australia did not begin in 1980 at 39% (its series starts around 1990 at 34%), and its 2020 figure is about 64%, not 45%. The statement that the USA was the first country to record overweight rates is also unsupported, since the graph shows different starting years for different countries. Some comparisons, such as England and Spain being around 48% and 42%, lack a clear year. To strengthen the response, give a precise overview of the overall rise and the highest and lowest projected rates, then select accurate comparisons across the countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, an overview, and further paragraphs that group several countries, so there is some organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the comparisons shift abruptly: Australia is introduced as the second country, then England, Spain, France, and Australia are discussed together, before the final paragraph moves among Italy, Korea, and Canada. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore” and “At last” do not always clarify how the information relates, and “whereas” is used in a way that leaves comparisons unclear. Organise the data into clearer groups, for example the highest-rising countries and those with lower rates, and use explicit time references to connect each comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “gradually went up,” “increasing,” “percentage,” and “maintained,” and the reader can generally identify the trends you intend to describe. However, the range is limited and several expressions are unnatural or imprecise, such as “to be on overweight rates,” “being overweight,” and “had a good increase.” “Skow progress” also contains a spelling error, while “drastic change” overstates Italy’s rise. Use standard graph language and precise trend verbs, such as “the proportion rose,” “increased steadily,” or “remained stable.” Take care to distinguish a rate from the people themselves: describe the percentage of the population who were overweight, rather than saying a country was overweight.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use time clauses and contrast, but complex structures are often faulty, and errors recur in basic sentence patterns. Examples include “United States was the fist one,” “England and Spain was,” and “Australia was the second country being overweight”; these show problems with articles, agreement, and sentence construction. The phrase “in the year on 1970” also has an incorrect preposition pattern, and “kept increasing with with time” contains repetition. Some sentences combine several comparisons without clear grammatical links, making the meaning harder to follow. Practise accurate simple trend sentences first, then add clauses with controlled connectors such as “while” and “whereas,” checking articles, verb agreement, and tense.

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