Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph provides comparison analysis past, current and projected future overweight rates by proportion from 1970 to 2020.

Overall, the USA and England counted most overwieghted almost all the time, while Korea shows the least overwieghted record over the time. and remaing countries (Canada, Spain, Austria, Italy, Australia, and France) seems like very less flactuations.

In the term of overweight increase, the USA numbers of overweight raised in 1980 from around 42% to 75% till 2020. England counted numbers raised as well from 45% in 1990 to near about 70% in 2020. While on other hand Australia number increased rapid from 1990 at percentage around 33% to 65% in 2020.

The least counted overweight numbers in Korea, it raised the year 2000 around 23% to approximately 46% in 2020. While the other countries (France, Italy, Austria and Spain), in these countries they don't have much difference although the numbers are increase on an average year the number increase is 1980 to 2020, which making around

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad pattern that rates generally rise, and your overview correctly places Korea at the low end and the USA and England among the highest. You also select several relevant country trends. However, some figures and comparisons are inaccurate: the USA starts at about 45% in 1972, dips slightly to 43% in 1980, and reaches roughly 74% by 2020, rather than rising from 42% in 1980. Korea is about 25% in 1998 and 35% in 2019, not 23% to 46%. The claim that the other countries show “very less fluctuations” overlooks substantial rises, such as Australia’s increase from about 34% to 64%. The final comparison is unfinished, so several countries’ trends are not clearly reported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing groups of countries. This helps the reader follow the general topic. However, progression is weakened by unclear or incomplete connections between ideas. For example, “While on other hand Australia…” does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence, and the final sentence ends with “which making around” without completing the comparison. The overview also groups six countries together without explaining a clear shared pattern, then the body does not develop that grouping consistently. Use complete topic sentences and organise the details into meaningful comparisons, such as the highest-rising countries versus those with lower rates. Check that each paragraph reaches a clear conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “projected,” “increased,” and “fluctuations,” and the reader can generally identify the subject of each paragraph. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate enough to make parts difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “counted most overwieghted,” “least counted overweight numbers,” and “numbers of overweight” are not natural ways to describe rates. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “overwieghted” and “flactuations.” Aim for precise chart language and consistent terms such as “the proportion of people who were overweight” or “the rate rose.” Avoid repeating “numbers” when “rate” or “figure” is more suitable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including contrast clauses beginning with “while,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and agreement occur in examples such as “the USA and England counted most,” “the other countries … seems,” and “the numbers are increase.” Some sentences lack necessary grammatical links, as in “it raised the year 2000,” while the final clause, “which making around,” is incomplete. Tense and preposition patterns also need attention when describing changes over time. These problems sometimes make the intended comparison hard to follow. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences, for example, “The rate in Korea rose from about 25% in 1998 to 35% in 2019,” and proofread each sentence for a clear verb and ending.

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