Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given line graph depicts the trends in the overweight rates of different OECD countries. In the graph we can see that the USA has the highest rates then any other country and Korea has the least rates. Where England is at second position and Australia at third position. Other countries are waving in trend where Canada and Spain are neck to neck with each other and Italy, France and Austria shown slight changes over the time

To begin with, we can observe that the countries are USA, Canada, England, Spain, Austria, Italy, Australia, France, Korea, where the USA has the highest rate from the Beginning of 1970 till year 2020 and England secured second position however Australia is not backing up either and currently sits at third place with rates over 50%. Spain and Canada are competing for fourth position with rates above 50% and other countries like Italy and Austria are seem to control there rates and shown slight rise maintaining it in between 40 and 50% and France had shown no visible change until the year 2000 and now raised slightly and on the other hand Korea is the only country which kept there rates under 40% since 2000

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern that the USA is highest and Korea lowest, and you note that rates generally rise. However, the report only partially covers the graph: it gives few precise comparisons or changes over time, and some claims are inaccurate. For example, Australia is not consistently third throughout the period, and by 2020 England is about 69% while Australia is about 64%. Canada and Spain are close near the end, but the graph does not show them simply “competing” across the whole period. The claim that Italy and Austria remain between 40% and 50% overlooks their earlier lower figures, while France does rise from around 31% to 44%. A clearer overview and selected, accurate start-to-end comparisons would make the key features more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an opening overview followed by a second paragraph, so there is some basic organisation, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “on the other hand” signal relationships between points. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the first paragraph lists rankings, while the second repeats several of the same points without organising countries into meaningful groups or stages. The long second paragraph also combines many comparisons in one sentence, making the relationships harder to follow. Some linking is awkward or unclear, as in “Where England is at second position” and “Other countries are waving in trend.” Grouping the highest, middle and lowest rates, then using clear time-based comparisons, would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant graph vocabulary, including “rates,” “trend,” “position,” and “slight rise,” and expressions such as “neck to neck” show an attempt to vary your language. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or too informal for an academic report. “Waving in trend” does not convey a clear meaning, “backing up” is conversational, and “competing for fourth position” treats the data as a contest rather than describing similar rates. There are also noticeable word-form and spelling problems, including “there” for “their” and “Beginning” unnecessarily capitalised. Prefer precise terms such as “increased,” “remained relatively stable,” and “ranked” to describe the data objectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some time-related clauses, but the range of structures is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “Where England is at second position” is an incomplete sentence, while “Italy and Austria are seem to control there rates and shown slight rise” contains problems with verb forms and agreement. The opening comparison, “the USA has the highest rates then any other country,” also has an incorrect comparative structure. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, and the second paragraph contains a long sentence joined by several clauses without clear boundaries. Build accuracy with complete sentences and controlled comparisons, for example: “The USA had the highest rate, followed by England.”

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