Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected-USA ,England,Canada,Spain,Austria,Australia,Italy and France,Korea countreies.

Overall it is clear that, The first highest persentage of people overweight rates by USA, followed by england also highest proportion of weight. Scondly, the second rank accounted for austria and spain weight high.While,least percentage of people past and future overwight for korea.Furthermore,canada remaind stable in the weight and next lowest proportion overwight countries italy ,france.

Looking at the details, firstly usa starting stage 45% of people overweight before projected reached at peaked 75% and followed by england similarly in 1990 46% to 69%.While,australia second highest proportion of the rate begun in 1990 only 32% to reached at high 65%.Canada and spain ,canada remaind stable in weight at 50% to 55% and spain 42% to 55% of people future rates weight.Korea least proportion of overweight in 2000 25% to end of the year 35%. Whereas,italy and france lowest percentage of people past and future weight rates in selected oecd countries (france 31% to 45% and italy 38% to 44%).

In summary,past and future overweight rates are usa and england. Second accounted for canada and spain,while least proportion of weight korea, therefore past and projected future overweight rates in selected oecd there are the countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern that the USA and England are among the highest, while Korea is lowest, and you include several relevant figures, such as the USA rising from about 45% to 75% and Korea from 25% to 35%. However, the overview is unclear and some comparisons are inaccurate or unsupported. Australia is described as reaching 65%, although the graph shows about 64%; France ends near 44%, not 45%, and Italy ends near 45.5%, not 44%. The claim that Canada remained stable overlooks its overall rise from roughly 50% to 55%. The response also does not clearly distinguish historical data from projections or summarise the overall upward trend across most countries. Select the main patterns and report them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview, a detail paragraph and a concluding sentence, so there is an attempt to organise the information. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview and conclusion repeat country rankings without clarifying them, and several comparisons are crowded together. For example, “Canada and spain, canada remained stable” repeats Canada and combines two trends in a confusing way. Linking words such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “Whereas” are used, but some do not show a clear relationship between the ideas that follow. Group countries by similar trends or levels, and use each paragraph for a distinct purpose. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise references would make the comparisons easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “projected,” “percentage,” and “reached,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “weight rates,” “second rank accounted for,” and “reached at peaked.” Spelling errors—including “persentage,” “countreies,” “Scondly,” and “overwight”—also make parts of the response harder to understand. Use standard terms such as “overweight rate,” “proportion of the population,” and “rose to,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary for trends, such as “increased steadily” or “remained broadly stable,” would help you describe the data more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use clauses, for example, “While, Australia second highest proportion of the rate begun in 1990…” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. The opening sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure, while phrases such as “USA starting stage 45%” and “Canada remained stable in the weight” omit necessary sentence elements or use them incorrectly. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “rates are USA and England.” Punctuation is unreliable, with commas attached to words and sentence boundaries unclear. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences, then combine them with accurate linking clauses.

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