Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the line graph illutrate the present and future projected speed of public having weights above normal in slected 9 nations, from 1970 to 2020 period of time.

overall USA and Cnaada reamined the leading nation in with highest overweight contribution.Korea remained the lowest amongst all the nation regarding overwight percentage of population .

USA started hight to record in 1970 about 46% of population while no other country had any contribution by that time.Till 1980 a sligh decrease was observed amogst the american overwight figures.after 1980 usa recorded the rapid increase in overwight numbers ot population ,Englant also observed surged in the overwight figures which started at 42% and went up drastically over the years to ame about 60% of overwight people.

Spain and canada steadily fluctuated till 20065 and then increasesd enifrmly till 2020, attaining the figure of about 55% number of people having obesity from initial 45% and 50% respectively in 90s.

korea rcorded the least enhancement in numner of bbesed public whic was initialy 25% around 1999 and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern that the USA is among the highest and Korea remains lowest, and you include several relevant country comparisons. However, the overview is incomplete and partly inaccurate: Canada did not remain a leading country throughout, and the graph shows the USA highest by 2020, with England and Australia also rising substantially. Some reported details are misread: England begins at about 47% in the early 1990s, not 42%, and the USA starts at about 45% in 1972 rather than 1970. The discussion of Spain and Canada is vague, and the final point about Korea is unfinished. Select the clearest overall trends and support them with accurate, comparable figures across the period shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it begins with an introduction and overview, then moves to country-specific details. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is brief and the body groups countries without a clear comparison or consistent order. For example, the sentence about Spain and Canada combines their trends, although their starting points and changes differ, while the final Korea point stops before completing the comparison. Linking phrases such as “after 1980” help indicate sequence, but connections between ideas are often unclear. Use separate, logically ordered paragraphs for the overview and key comparisons, and ensure each paragraph develops a complete point with clear references to the countries and years.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt task-relevant vocabulary, including “projected,” “fluctuated,” “rapid increase,” and “percentage of population.” However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “illutrate,” “slected,” “overwight,” and “enifrmly.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “overweight contribution” and “enhancement in number of … public” do not clearly describe rates. Use standard terms consistently, such as “proportion of people who were overweight,” “rose,” and “declined slightly.” Careful proofreading and more precise collocations would make your comparisons clearer and reduce the effort required of the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a time clause in “after 1980 USA recorded the rapid increase,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in articles, agreement, tense, and sentence construction occur frequently: “USA and Canada remained the leading nation” has a plural subject but singular noun, while “USA started hight to record” does not form a clear grammatical sentence. Several clauses are joined without reliable punctuation, and the final sentence is incomplete. These problems sometimes make the intended meaning hard to recover. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add time clauses and comparisons. Check articles and plurals, and make sure every sentence has a complete main clause and appropriate punctuation.

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