Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph provides the information about the past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future ovedrwight rate in nine selected countries.

overall, it is clear that the highest peaked of USA is increased meanwhile, the propertion of korea has decreased slightly over the period.

initially, in the year 1970, the past and the projectedof USA had slightly decreased was about 42% approximately. by 1980 to2020 the overweights rate dramatically increaqsed with 73%. The england had incr4eased and the spain had been steadily increased in 1980 to 2020 .

by constrast, the projected future overweight rates in austria in 1970 to 2020 have been stea

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the USA as having a high rate and attempts to compare several countries, but it does not provide a sufficiently accurate or complete summary of the graph. The overview says Korea’s proportion “has decreased slightly,” whereas the data show it rising from about 25% to 35%. The USA figure is broadly close, but the description of its early movement is unclear, and the claim that England and Spain increased from 1980 is not supported by the plotted starting dates. The final sentence about Austria is unfinished. The response is also 97 words, below the required 150; this leaves major trends and comparisons unreported. Select the clearest overall patterns and support them with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and body paragraphs, and sequencing words such as “initially” and “by contrast” show an effort to guide the reader. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview is inaccurate and the body shifts between countries without a clear comparison or consistent time frame. The final phrase, “have been stea,” is incomplete, so the response ends abruptly. Some linking expressions do not clarify the relationship between ideas, particularly “meanwhile” in the overview. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and grouped country trends, and connect each comparison explicitly. Completing each sentence and maintaining a clear chronological or comparative structure would improve coherence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “overweight rates,” “increased,” “decreased,” and “steadily,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to interpret: “ovedrwight,” “propertion,” and “increaqsed” are noticeable, while “highest peaked” is an unnatural combination. “Dramatically” is also stronger than needed unless the scale of change is clearly established. Aim for accurate, varied language for describing trends, such as “rose,” “remained stable,” and “reached,” and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish gradual changes from substantial rises.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple and compound sentence forms, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and several structures obscure the intended meaning. For example, “the highest peaked of USA is increased” combines an incorrect noun phrase with an awkward verb construction, while “the past and the projectedof USA had slightly decreased was about 42%” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Tense and sentence patterns are also unreliable in “the Spain had been steadily increased.” The final clause is incomplete, preventing the reader from understanding the point about Austria. Practise clear past-tense reporting and straightforward comparison structures, for example, “The US rate rose from about 43% in 1980 to 74% in 2020.” Check articles, verb forms and sentence completion.

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