Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates proportions of overweight rates of present and past, along with projected future overweight percentages in nine distinct countries.

Overall, it is clear that USA is dominating in the group by showing a steady increase. England and Australia experienced the largest percentages of overweight. France and Korea are the represented the smallest overweight proportion.

By looking at the details in depth, USA experienced a steady rise in the percentge started with 47% in 1970, followed by a steady increase of about 73% in 2020. England and Australia are largest in group, with 70% and 65% overweight proportions in 2020 respectively. Spain experienced gradual increase from 43% to 55% between[redacted phone].

Additionally, Canada marked about 54% overweight ratio until 2020. Austria represented steady pace from [redacted phone], followed by rapid fluctuations until 2020 with a percentage of 48%. Italy and France expressed about 43% with rapid oscillations. Korea remained the last in gr

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern of rising rates and note that Korea is among the lowest, which gives the response a relevant overview. However, the overview is not consistently accurate: England and Australia are not the highest overall in 2020, as the USA reaches about 74% and England about 69%. The USA begins at roughly 45% in 1972, rather than 47% in 1970, and Austria ends near 46.5%, not 48%. Some comparisons are also incomplete: France and Korea are described as the lowest without explaining their approximate final figures, and the final sentence is unfinished. Select the clearest highs, lows and overall trends, then support them with accurate comparisons across the countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and a paragraph of country details. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “By looking at the details in depth” and “Additionally” signal movement between sections. However, the progression within the detail paragraph is mostly a list of countries rather than a clear grouping or comparison, and some references are difficult to follow, as in “Canada marked about 54% overweight ratio until 2020.” The final sentence, “Korea remained the last in gr,” is incomplete and disrupts the ending. Organise the details into meaningful groups, such as the highest and lowest rates, and use clear comparisons to connect the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a graph, including “steady increase,” “gradual increase,” “proportions” and “fluctuations.” This shows an attempt to vary language, but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural and sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “USA is dominating in the group” is an awkward way to describe the highest rate, while “largest percentages of overweight” does not clearly identify the countries’ ranking. “Rapid oscillations” is also not supported by the relatively modest changes shown for Italy and France. There are spelling errors such as “percentge,” and the unfinished “gr” further affects clarity. Prefer precise, conventional graph language and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You produce a mix of simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall meaning is often recoverable. However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms occur across the response. For example, “France and Korea are the represented the smallest” has an incorrect verb structure, while “USA experienced a steady rise in the percentge started with 47%” lacks a grammatical link between the trend and its starting point. The phrase “between1980-2020” also uses an unclear time construction, and “Canada marked about 54% overweight ratio” is not formed naturally as a complete comparison. The final sentence is incomplete. Practise building accurate sentences with “rose from … to …,” “stood at …,” and “while,” and proofread each sentence for a complete clause.

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