Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph demonstrates previous and recent current overweight rates in percentages of nine different countries (USA, Canada, England, Spain, Austria, Itely, Australia, France and Korea) from 1970 to 2020. All countries are showing upward trens some fluctuation.

At first, USA overweight rate was less than 50%. In 1970 it start declining since 1980 and later it was rising gradually since 2020 and it was the dominator in this period with more than 70% of over current rates. On the other hand, England and Spain current overweight began from near 1990 and it was less than 50% for both initially. Finally, England reach almost 70% while Spain reach at 55% in the year of 2020.

For Canada, it start after the year 1990 it was 50% and later without a big jump it became 55% at the end. Austria and Italy reached the same position at ending but Austria start from near 1980 and Italy after 1990 and it was in between the range of (40%-30%)

Australia and France was same at the begining with more than 30% of overweight and australia's rate jumped into more than 60% while France's was just more than 40%.

Korea was the country who have least overweight rate on these decades, start with 25% In near 2000 and end up with 35% in the year of 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the overall upward direction and make relevant comparisons, including the USA’s high endpoint, Korea’s lowest rates, and Australia’s rise to above 60%. However, the overview is too broad: “All countries are showing upward trends” overlooks fluctuations and does not clearly summarise the main contrast between the highest and lowest countries. Some details are inaccurate or unclear. The USA began at about 45%, dipped slightly by 1980, then rose; it did not simply “start declining” and rise “since 2020.” Austria and Italy did not finish at the same level: Austria was around 46–47%, compared with Italy at about 45–46%. Several countries receive little detail, so the report only partly selects and develops the graph’s key features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure and groups some countries together, which helps the reader follow the report. Comparisons such as England and Spain, and Austria and Italy, are relevant. However, progression is uneven: the opening gives a general statement, while the country-by-country paragraphs do not consistently organise information by major trends or levels. Linking phrases such as “At first,” “On the other hand,” and “Finally” are sometimes used imprecisely, and “For Canada” begins a new point without a clear connection to the preceding comparison. Some references, including “it” and “this period,” are unclear. Grouping countries into high, middle, and low-rate trends and using clearer links would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “overweight rates,” “gradually,” “fluctuation,” and “at the end,” and you attempt to describe changes and comparisons. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. “Dominator” is not suitable for describing the USA’s position, and “jumped into more than 60%” is an awkward way to report a rise. There are also spelling errors such as “Itely,” “trens,” and “begining,” alongside repeated use of “rate” and “start.” Use precise trend language and check spelling to make descriptions clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, but errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between events difficult to follow. For example, “In 1970 it start declining since 1980” has an incorrect verb form and an unclear time relationship; “England reach almost 70%” and “it start after the year 1990” also need past-tense forms. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “Australia and France was,” and articles and sentence boundaries are often missing or awkward. Most sentences rely on basic patterns, with limited accurate control of complex structures. Practise past-tense reporting and agreement, and build longer sentences around clear clauses, such as “After dipping slightly by 1980, the US rate rose steadily.”

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