Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

THE LINE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THE RATE OF PAST,PRESENT AND FUTURE OVERWEIGHT IN NINE CONTRIES USA, ENGLAND, CANADA, ITALY, AUSTRIA, SPAIN, FRANCE, KOREA AND AUSTRALIA. OVERALL IN THIS ALL NINE OECD COUNTRIES THE HIGHEST OVERWEIGHTED COUNTRY WAS USA IN THE ALL YEARS FROM 1970 TO 2020 AND THE LOWEST COUNTRY WAS KOREA.

ON THE ONE HAND, THE USA STARTED WITH 45% AND INCREASED RAPIDLY BY 75% AT THE END OF 2020. ENGLAND STARTED IN THE YEAR 1992 WITH 48% AND GOWN CLOSE TO USA WHICH WERE NEAR TO 70%, FOLLOWED BY CANADA, IN YEAR 1995 IT WAS AT 50% AND ONLY GREW LITTLE BIT AT THE END OF 2020 BY 55%. AFTER THAT SPAIN INCREASED BY 42 TO 55 PERCENTAGE FROM 1988 TO 2020. AUSTRIA BIGAN FROM 38% TO 48% IN 1984 TO 2020.

ON THE OTHER HAND, AUSTRALIA STARED AT 32% IN 1989 AND IN 2020 IT ENDED WITH 62%. ITALY, FRANCE AND KOREA STARED LOW AND ENDED ON AN AVERAGE MARK APROXEMATILY AT 35% IN 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the graph’s subject and give a broad overview that the USA is highest and Korea lowest, which captures an important overall pattern. You also report several country trends and approximate figures. However, the overview is incomplete: most countries rise, but the response does not clearly summarise this shared trend or compare the countries’ different levels. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the USA reaches about 74%, not 75% (a small difference), while Austria is around 46–47% in 2019 rather than 48%; Australia is about 64%, rather than 62%. The final claim that Italy, France and Korea all end at roughly 35% overlooks France’s higher figure of about 44%. Select the most significant comparisons and report them more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by two body paragraphs, and phrases such as “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” signal a change in focus. However, the grouping is not consistently logical: the first body paragraph moves through several countries without explaining why they belong together, while the second groups Italy, France and Korea despite their different ending rates. The sequence of comparisons can therefore feel like a list rather than a clear progression. Some linking phrases are also awkward or do not express a meaningful contrast. Organise the details into clearer groups, such as the highest-rate countries and the lower-rate countries, and use straightforward links like “Meanwhile” or “By contrast” where appropriate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant graph vocabulary, including “rate,” “increased,” “started” and “ended,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “increased rapidly by 75%” when describing a rise to a value, “grew little bit,” and “ended on an average mark.” Spelling errors—including “contr ies,” “gown,” “bigan,” “stared” and “aproxem atily”—are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause. Aim for precise terms for values and trends, and check spelling carefully. For example, distinguish “rose to 75%” from “rose by 30 percentage points,” and use “approximately” when giving estimates.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine information in longer sentences, for example when describing England and Canada, and the basic meaning is often recoverable. However, the response relies heavily on simple sentence patterns, and attempts to connect clauses are frequently faulty. In “England started in the year 1992 with 48% and gown close to USA,” the verb form and the construction after “close” are not controlled; “which were near to 70%” also has an unclear reference. There are recurring problems with articles, prepositions and sentence boundaries, as in “in the all years” and “in 2020 it ended with 55%.” Practise accurate comparative structures and past-tense reporting, such as “England rose to nearly 70%, while Canada reached about 55%.”

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