Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates past and current overweight charges along with the future prediction of the rates.

USA begins with around 49% in 1970 and then reduces by 1980 to almost 42% and then takes a leap by 2020 to around 85%, England also begins at almost 42% and gradually increases upto 70% in 2020, Spain starts around 41% and goes maximum to 52% till 2020 whereas Canada begins right at the centre with 50% but only increases slightly by 2020 to 55%, Austria begins at a little less than 40% stays almost same till 1990 then has a little increase to 45% but suffers a downfall in 2010 and again goes uptill 45% by 2020. France exactly has 30% and then increases upto 45%. Moreover, we have Italy that starts a little below 40% and again ends up at 45%. Lastly, we have Korea that has the lowest rates in past and projected future, starting at just about 25% and going upto only 35%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad subject and report several relevant country trends, including Korea’s lowest rates and the USA’s overall rise. However, the response does not provide a clear overview of the main features across the graph, and several figures or descriptions are inaccurate: the USA reaches about 74%, not 85%, in 2020; Spain is around 55%, not 52%; and France is about 44%, rather than 45%. The USA begins near 45%, not 49%, while England’s first plotted value is about 47%, not 42%. The account also gives country-by-country details without highlighting the overall contrast between the highest and lowest rates. A concise overview and more accurate selection of key comparisons would make the response more complete and relevant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a recognisable sequence, moving through the countries and ending with Korea, so the reader can identify which series is being discussed. However, almost all the information is packed into one long sentence, joined repeatedly by “and,” “whereas,” and “but.” This makes the progression difficult to follow and gives the report a list-like quality rather than a clear overview followed by organised details. Some transitions, such as “Moreover” and “Lastly,” signal order but do not establish meaningful groupings or comparisons. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and supporting details, and group countries with similar or contrasting trends. Shorter sentences and clearer links between comparisons would improve the organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the general direction of the lines, including “increases,” “reduces,” “slightly,” and “lowest rates.” There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “takes a leap” and “suffers a downfall,” but these are too informal or imprecise for an academic report. Several choices are awkward for describing data: “overweight charges” is not the correct term, and “goes maximum” does not clearly express a peak or endpoint. Repetition of “begins,” “increases,” and “goes” also limits precision. Choose neutral reporting verbs and accurate terms for proportions and trends; this will make the account more natural and suitably formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine several clauses and comparisons, for example, “Austria begins … stays almost same … then has a little increase … but suffers a downfall.” This shows some ability to form extended sentences, but the structures are often difficult to control because many clauses are joined together without clear punctuation. The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical link between “past and current” rates and the prediction. Articles and prepositions are sometimes missing, as in “stays almost same,” and the long sentence about the countries makes relationships between ideas harder to follow. Use a wider mix of shorter and complex sentences, check articles and verb forms, and punctuate each comparison clearly.

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