Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the past, current and projected furture obesity rates in nine selected OECD countries.

Overall, the obesity rates are increasing in all nine countries with USA having highest obesity problem throughout the graph and korea with the least.

In late 1970, almost 47% of USA citizens were suffering from obesity, there was a slight decline dropping this score to just above 40% in 1980 before having massive increase on following years reaching approxmatively 75% in the early 2020. Meanwhile, overweight rate in england was just below 50% in 1990 and with gradual rise in number in each year as in 2020 this percentage reached just below 70%. Canada maintained its share from 50% in early 2000 to around 54% in 2020.

Furthermore, spain and austria showed gradual rise from approxmatively 41% and 39% in late 1980 to 53% and 47% in early 2020. However, italy was relatively stable around 37% and 44% in 2020. Australia experienced significantly increase from just above 30% in 1980 to approxmatively 64% in 2020. Moreover, france was at 30% in early 1990 and have fluctuation before raching 43% in 2020. Korea which is least in whole graph was just above 20% in early 2000 with slight rise it was around 35% in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You provide a clear overview that rates generally rise and identifies the USA as highest and Korea as lowest, then cover all nine countries with relevant comparisons. Most figures and trends are close to the chart: for example, the USA reaches about 74% by 2020, while Korea ends near 35%. Some details are less accurate or less fully developed. The USA begins at about 45%, not 47%, and its 2020 value is a projection rather than a current figure. Australia’s series starts around 1990 at 34%, not in 1980, and Spain’s 2019 figure is about 55%, rather than 53%. Also, the claim that the USA is highest throughout is not supported at the earliest point, when England is slightly higher. More precise time references and a clearer distinction between past, current and projected data would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by two paragraphs grouping countries, and linking expressions such as “Meanwhile,” “Furthermore,” and “Moreover” help signal comparisons. This gives the report a coherent progression and makes the main trends easy to follow. To make the organisation more flexible and precise, group countries by meaningful patterns or levels rather than moving through them in a largely list-like sequence. Some links are also awkward: “However” introduces Italy even though the contrast with the preceding countries is not clearly explained, and “with slight rise” does not clearly connect Korea’s starting and ending figures. Use explicit comparisons and clearer referencing to show how each country relates to the others.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of trend vocabulary, including “slight decline,” “gradual rise,” “relatively stable,” and “fluctuation,” and the meaning is generally clear. However, some choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing this graph. “Obesity problem” is less neutral than “overweight rate,” and “suffering from obesity” adds an unsupported judgement. “Maintained its share” is not a natural collocation for a percentage, while “experienced significantly increase” uses the wrong form and collocation. There are also spelling errors, including “furture,” “approxmatively,” and “raching.” Aim for consistent, neutral terms such as “proportion” or “rate,” and check spelling and word forms carefully so that your otherwise relevant vocabulary sounds more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “before” and “while,” and the overall meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, particularly with verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “france was at 30% … and have fluctuation” should use a past-tense verb and a suitable noun phrase, while “Australia experienced significantly increase” needs a grammatical noun phrase after the verb. In “with slight rise it was around 35%,” the opening phrase needs an article and clearer punctuation or clause structure. Capitalise country names consistently, and check agreement and tense when describing historical data. More accurate control of these patterns would make the report smoother without sacrificing the range of structures you attempt.

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