Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

These days , Science doing well growth in technical world similarly in medical world and so more. In addition science is famous for their invantions , logical formulas and solutions for major space projects. in the same manner Science does not have specific goal to improve individual's lives. I totally disagree and i oppose the view and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.

Firstly , Science have biology , chemsitry and physics . These subjects have own importance and solutions in their own field furthermore science helps us to understand our body and health that how in which position are in . Another factor us consider is understands and broad our perspective of logical thinking. Not only this but also Science doing great archievement in astronomy . Similary Science helps us to teach our physical balance and lead us how to treat disease .

Secondly , Science only lead us what precuations we need to take , on top of that people have self awareness and responsibilty to improve their health and living standard. In addition Blood pressure tracker machine , Steps count machine , Heartbeat checker machines . These machines invented by science with the help of technology humans can do self help and check their own medical conditions. Science gives us solutions about our day to day problems. For instance IT company invented automatic house cleaner machine in which only details required to add such as name and house length and machine ot selfs cleans the house . So in invented with the help of science . It helps to do our lives easy.

In conclusion , as per my view Science inventions doing our jobs easy , but not have aim to improve our lifestyle .It has in our hands how to improve our lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall disagreement, especially in the introduction and conclusion, and you include relevant examples such as health-monitoring devices and an automatic house cleaner. However, the response only partially develops the question of whether improving people’s lives should be science’s most important aim. Much of the discussion describes what science does or what individuals should do, rather than explaining why improving lives should or should not be its primary goal. The claim that science “does not have specific goal” is not fully reconciled with your examples of inventions that make life easier. To strengthen the response, explain your position more precisely and develop each example to show how it supports your argument about science’s priorities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly” and “In conclusion” make the broad structure visible. However, the ideas do not progress consistently: the first body paragraph moves from scientific subjects to health, logical thinking and astronomy without clearly connecting these points to your position. The second paragraph combines personal responsibility, medical devices and a cleaning machine, so its central argument is difficult to follow. Some linking phrases, including “In addition” and “on top of that,” are used mechanically, and references such as “It” in the final example are unclear. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain how its example supports that claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “logical thinking,” “astronomy,” “medical conditions” and “living standard.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “invantions,” “chemsitry,” “precautions” (written as “precuations”) and “Science doing great archievement.” Some phrases are also imprecise, including “physical balance” and “details required to add.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than adding technical-sounding terms. Learning topic vocabulary in phrases—for example, how to describe scientific research, public health and quality of life—would help you express your ideas more clearly and precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “but” and a reason introduced by “For instance.” However, the range of structures is limited, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in phrases such as “Science doing well growth,” “Science have biology” and “Science inventions doing our jobs easy.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “In addition Blood pressure tracker machine, Steps count machine, Heartbeat checker machines.” These problems sometimes make the intended relationships between ideas unclear. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles and punctuation before submitting.

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