Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Science play a very important role in the modren world.Some people belive that the main goal of science should be make human lives better.I completely agree with this ststement because scientific process can solve major health problems and make daily life much easly everything.

On the one hand, the most important way science can help people is through medicine and health care.In the past many people died from simple diseases because there were no proper treatment.However, scientific reserch his created vaccines and antibiotic that save million of lives every year. For example durning the recent global pandemic scientists worked quickly to development vaccines that protected people and allowed society to return to normal

On the other hand, science should be used to improve our daliy living stared and procted the enviroment. modren technology which comes from scienceficdiscoveries help people faster and travel easily. In addition, science can solve seriouly global program like climate change and lack of clean water.

To sum up, I strongly agree that improving people's lives should be the science. scien can easly life style and daily basis work , some work is to hard but science easly solve the problme . that's why scince should improve people's lives .

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion5.5
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you “completely agree,” and the response gives relevant reasons involving medicine, everyday technology, and environmental problems. The vaccine example is a useful illustration of science improving lives. However, the task is only partly developed: the health-care point has some explanation, while the claims about technology, climate change, and clean water are mostly listed rather than supported with examples or reasoning. The conclusion also repeats your view without adding a developed final insight. The response contains 203 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 250; this limits the space available to explain and support your ideas. Develop each main point with a specific example and explain its effect on people’s lives.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion beginning “To sum up.” This helps the reader identify the main stages of your argument. However, progression within paragraphs is limited: the second body paragraph moves quickly from technology to climate change and clean water without showing how these ideas connect. Some linking is mechanical, and the final sentences repeat the central claim rather than bringing the discussion together clearly. Improve cohesion by organising each paragraph around one main idea, then using explanation and an example to develop it. Check that references such as “this” or “it” clearly identify the idea being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “vaccines,” “antibiotic,” “climate change,” and “clean water,” and these choices make your subject clear. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts difficult to understand, such as “modren,” “daliy living stared,” and “global program.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “make daily life much easly everything” and “improve people’s lives should be the science.” Aim to learn accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “improve living standards” and “address global challenges” would help you explain your ideas clearly without relying on repeated general words such as “help” and “life.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example, “because scientific process can solve major health problems” and “which comes from scienceficdiscoveries help people faster.” However, many sentences contain errors in sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and agreement, which sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “Science play,” “should be make,” and “scientific reserch his created.” The final sentence also combines several ideas without clear grammatical connections. Work first on forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check singular/plural agreement and articles. Then practise joining clauses with accurate structures such as “because,” “which,” and “although,” while using full stops to separate complete ideas.

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