Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays,Science and technologhy made a great and positive impact on humans life of modern era,Such as transport medical better food and more oppurtunity for carrer in practical life.But it also had a negative impacts on humans life for instance,throught modern industries our enviroment got polluted and this cause many new disease and also effect humans life,But in my oppinion science and modern technology had a positive impacts on our lifes.

One important reason why science aim to improve people lives.We know that before industrial revaloution human spend their life with many difficulties like thet don't have proper coureing process of many disease in spite of science make a lot of progress in medical field and now in modern era we have almost have coure of all disease.For instance in past there is no treatment for the patients of cancer but scientists had a progress in this and now many patients of cancer is coured with successful rate.

Another reason is that science also had a great influence on almost all parts of life.Especially it had alot of progress in education and transport field.Before the revolution of science people face a lot of difficulties in transport but scientists had a great inventions in these field like aeroplane,cars,bike and etc.Throught these inventions people can travel safely and fastly by trains and Aeroplanes.Althought the students of modern era had a lot facilities in modern era like they can study while sitting at home at any time by Mobilephones and computers.

In conclusion,I strongly agree with that the science had a great and positive influence on humans life of modern era in almost all sectors of life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that science has improved people’s lives, and you give relevant reasons involving medicine, transport and education. The cancer-treatment example supports the medical point, while the references to travel and studying at home illustrate practical benefits. You also briefly acknowledge environmental harm, which shows awareness of a counterpoint. However, the response focuses mainly on examples of progress rather than explaining why improving lives should be science’s most important aim. The environmental concern is introduced but not developed or weighed against your position, and some claims, such as having a cure for almost every disease, are too broad. Develop the central argument and qualify generalisations to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting reasons, and a conclusion that restates your view. The ideas are generally grouped appropriately, with medicine discussed separately from transport and education. You also use linking expressions such as “For instance,” “Another reason,” and “In conclusion” to guide the reader. At times, however, connections feel mechanical or unclear. The opening sentence moves quickly from benefits to environmental harm and back to your position, while the long second body paragraph combines transport and education without a clear transition. Some references, such as “these field,” are not clear or accurate. Use shorter, more focused paragraphs and make the relationship between each example and your main claim explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “industrial revolution,” “medical field,” “disease,” “transport,” and “inventions,” so the main ideas are understandable. There are also attempts to use more specific expressions, such as “treatment for the patients of cancer” and “environment got polluted.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable throughout, including “technologhy,” “oppurtunity,” “coured,” and “fastly.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “positive impacts on humans life” and “progress in these field,” which can make the reader pause. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations as complete phrases—for example, “people’s lives,” “cancer treatment,” and “make progress in a field”—rather than relying on direct translation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “before,” “but,” and “although.” This gives the response some variety, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, there are some recurring problems with sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb forms. For example, “One important reason why science aim to improve people lives” is not a complete, correctly formed sentence, and “science and modern technology had a positive impacts” has agreement and tense problems. Several sentences run together with commas or capital letters used inconsistently, particularly in the introduction. Practise building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses carefully. Check subject–verb agreement, singular and plural forms, and punctuation when proofreading.

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