Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

These days, science play a important rule in improve people life style. Some people believe that the aim of science not improve our lives.But i believe the science is play a major role in improve our lifestyle. I completely agree and in this essay i will support my opinion with example

Firstly, science can help us in medical. For example it can help us to improve our health today we have to need all life saver things with the help of science. we need different types of medicine,also we need machines related medical.

Another reason, why i agree with the aim of science is improve people's lives. Today we need science to make some new ideas for our lifestyle. In world we loss oil as well as time pass so we need its backup plan so its can be only possible from the help of science.

In conclusion, i will ask that if aim of science is not to improve our lifestyle so we not life in this world. i this world science is very important to improve our lifestyle. some people think science not change there life but in fact its change our full living things. we need to

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear position—“I completely agree”—and give relevant areas to support it, especially medical care and finding alternatives as resources such as oil become scarce. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the reasons are brief, and examples such as “different types of medicine” and “machines related medical” are named rather than explained. The point about a “backup plan” is difficult to understand and is not connected clearly to how science improves people’s lives. The conclusion repeats your view but does not add support. The response is 50 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your ideas. Explain each reason with a specific example and its effect on people’s lives.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning with “Firstly” and “Another reason,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader identify the main sections, and the discussion generally stays focused on science and quality of life. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several links between ideas are unclear. For example, the move from “we loss oil” to needing a “backup plan” does not explain the relationship between these points. The conclusion also repeats earlier claims rather than drawing the reasons together. Develop each paragraph around one clear point, then use a sentence to explain or illustrate it; make references such as “it” and “its” explicit so the reader can follow them.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “medical,” “health,” “medicine,” and “lifestyle,” and phrases such as “life saver” show an attempt to express the importance of scientific advances. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “important rule,” “help us in medical,” and “machines related medical.” Repetition of “improve our lifestyle” also restricts precision. These problems sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow, particularly in the discussion of oil and a “backup plan.” Build a small set of accurate topic phrases, such as “medical treatment,” “medical equipment,” and “alternative energy sources,” and check that each phrase expresses the intended idea naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall meaning of your position can usually be understood. However, the range of structures is very limited, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “science play,” “a important,” and “the science is play”; the sentence beginning “Today we need science” also contains several clauses joined without clear grammatical control. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “But i” and the run-on conclusion. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences using clear conjunctions. Proofread for complete sentences, articles, and consistent capital letters, especially at the start of sentences and for “I.”

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