Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Most important aim of science should be to change the lives of people in better way. Firstly during the evolution in science it was only intention of the researchers to develop methods which can be used to produce goods that can make people life easy, but with the passage of time this aim influenced by the other factors and knowledge of scince also started to be used in bad ways like producing weapons.

In my opinion if there was no developement in science many people will die with simplest of the diseases like earlier. Medical sciences are the best of example how science is improving people way of living. With the simple blood test in laboratory we can know about the diseases beforehand and can treat them before they can even express themselves.

Everything has advantage and disadvantages both. Its mostly depend upon peolpe how they use it. Too much use of technology on the other hand made people dependent. Simplest of the chores which people can do earlier with their own hands are now done by appliances. People dont even remember simple contact numbers and every information they store in mobile phone, these actions i think causing decline in people brain usage capacity.I think there should be some restrictions on each scientific application to make it usefull in specific ways only. for example, with easy access to internet young minds can be distracted. There should be proper check and balance for users.

Science is not just the name of single subject, but it has number of deciplines included that are interconnected one or the other way. Discoveries in science made our life easier as compared from many centuries back, but should not be fully dependent on science and technology and always should find ways to use our own mind and body for daily work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the question and maintain a broadly clear position: science has improved people’s lives, but its applications can also be harmful and should be controlled. The medical example—using blood tests to detect illness early—directly supports your view, while the discussion of weapons and technology’s effects adds relevant qualification. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For instance, the claim that technology reduces people’s “brain usage capacity” is asserted without explaining how this happens or giving a specific example. Your conclusion also repeats the idea of avoiding dependence rather than clearly restating how far you agree. Develop the supporting reasoning and make your degree of agreement explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: it introduces the issue, develops benefits and drawbacks, and ends with a concluding view. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “on the other hand,” and “for example” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, and several different points are crowded into long paragraphs. The shift from medical benefits to technology dependence, then to restrictions on internet access, could be organised more clearly into separate paragraphs with one central purpose each. Some links are also unclear, particularly “these actions i think causing decline,” where the connection between storing contacts and reduced mental capacity needs explanation. Use clearer topic sentences and more precise referencing to make the argument flow smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “researchers,” “weapons,” “diseases,” “appliances,” and “scientific application.” These choices allow you to discuss both the benefits and risks of science. However, word choice and collocation are often imprecise, and spelling errors are noticeable, as in “scince,” “developement,” “peolpe,” and “deciplines.” Phrases such as “make people life easy,” “best of example,” and “proper check and balance” do not sound natural in this context. Aim to learn common word partnerships and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you express your ideas clearly without relying on repeated general terms such as “people” and “science.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and relative structures, as in “if there was no developement in science…” and “methods which can be used to produce goods.” This gives the response some variety, and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “this aim influenced by the other factors” needs a finite verb, while “Everything has advantage and disadvantages both” has problems with number and article use. The sentence beginning “Simplest of the chores” also shifts awkwardly between past and present. Review basic sentence patterns and verb agreement, and use full stops to separate ideas that currently run together.

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