Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

From a long time, the main motive of science is to make life comfertable for humans and improve it. However, making life comfertable has also brought some major consequences with it. It is important aim of science to improve humans life but it should not be done by compromising other organisms life. I believe, now science should focus more on restoring what lost during all those years.

Science had made countless inventions for making each and every individual's life easy, such as the invention of mobile phone, you can talk to anyone who is at the other end of the globe. The invention of air conditioners and heaters, if it's too hot you can make you surroundings cool and if its too cold you can make it warm. Moreover, the invention of cars made travelling easier and faster. All theses inventions are made to improve humans life, however for our comfert we forget that there are also other living organisms on this planet, who can not work or think like humans and all these new technologies can be harmful for them.

Global warming and loss of biodiversity are the main drawbacks of using new technologies. Air conditioners and cars releases carbon dioxide which contribute to greenhouse effect, which is directly responsible for the increasing temperature of our planet. Furthermore, mobile signol towers create electric waves which are not visible but harm the birds, which directly leads to loss of biodiversity. In addition, forestfire, overheating and blasting of transformers, all these scenarios contribute in both global warming and biodiversity loss.

To sum up all, science has done a lot to improve human life, and I believe now its time for science to focus more on these problems and restoring what is lost.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: science should improve human life, but not at the expense of other organisms, and you argue that it should now help repair environmental damage. The examples of cars, air conditioning and mobile phones support the first part of the discussion, while global warming and biodiversity loss explain your concern. This addresses the question and gives relevant reasons. However, the response focuses more on the consequences of technology than on explaining the extent of your agreement with the statement. Some points, such as the effects of mobile signal towers and transformer incidents, are asserted rather than explained or supported. To develop the argument further, clarify whether improving lives remains science’s primary aim, and show how environmental protection can be part of that aim rather than a replacement for it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall structure: an introduction states your position, two body paragraphs present examples and consequences, and the conclusion returns to your main view. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore” and “To sum up” help readers follow the sequence. The progression from inventions to environmental effects is generally logical. At times, however, the links between ideas are mechanical or unclear. The list of “forestfire, overheating and blasting of transformers” appears without explaining how each relates to the preceding point, and the relationship between mobile towers and biodiversity loss needs a clearer transition. Some references, such as “these problems” and “what is lost,” are broad. Group related examples and use more precise references to make the argument flow more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “inventions,” “biodiversity,” “greenhouse effect” and “restoring,” which allows you to discuss both technology and environmental costs. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “at the other end of the globe.” However, spelling and word-choice errors sometimes reduce precision: “comfertable,” “signol,” “theses” and “forestfire” are inaccurate, while “electric waves” is not the most natural term in this context. Phrases such as “make life easy” and “new technologies” are repeated and could be made more precise. Aim to check spelling carefully and choose established collocations, for example “improve quality of life,” “radio waves” and “environmental damage.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “however,” “which” and “if,” and the main ideas remain understandable. Some sentence forms are controlled, such as “I believe, now science should focus more on restoring what lost during all those years.” However, errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction occur in several places. For example, “Air conditioners and cars releases” should use a plural verb, and “which contribute to greenhouse effect” needs clearer agreement and an article. “Science had made” is not the appropriate tense for a general historical claim, while “what lost” is missing a verb form. Review subject–verb agreement, articles and tense choice, and revise long sentences to ensure each clause is grammatically complete.

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