Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people believe that to improve people's lives should be the most important aim of science. I strongly agree with this statement because good living is one of the precious gift of life, so science should prioritise improving people's life more than any other goal the have.

Firstly, health, science has improve our health sectors in different wasy such as providing vaccines and medications to coure and prevent diseases like polio, HIV, malaria and other sicknesses. Furthemore, science has contribute to the improvement of the life spine of humans through the vaccines and medications they produce. For example, when someone is sick the first thing his relative will do is to take him to hospital to receive treatment.

Secondly, technology makes our daily life easier such as our daily movements, in our working places, the smartphone we use and also the internet, all this are possible through the help of science. For instance, you can stay in your comfort zone today and chat with anyone all over the world either through facebook, instagram, whatsapp or other social medias. Furthermore, it has made our daily movement easier through the use of vehicles, motorbikes, aeroplanes, ships. Science also make our communications very easy through smart phone, tiktok, snapchat, one can just pickup his phone here in Nigeria and call his relatives in America without any stress.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives because good livings is one of the preciocous gift of lives. Science has also improved our health care through the vaccines and medications they provides, it also improves our standard of living through technology.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction to the conclusion: you strongly agree that science should prioritise improving people’s lives. You support this with relevant areas, especially healthcare and technology, and examples such as vaccines, treatment, transport and international communication. This addresses the task, but the two main ideas are not developed equally or in much depth. The healthcare paragraph lists benefits but does not explain their broader impact, while the technology paragraph gives several examples without exploring why they make life better. The claim that good living is a “precious gift” is repeated rather than used to extend the argument. To strengthen the response, explain the effects of one or two examples and connect them directly to your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs organised around health and technology, and a conclusion. “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help signal this progression, so the reader can follow the main argument. However, some linking is mechanical, and ideas within the technology paragraph are presented as a long list rather than grouped and developed. The opening phrase “Firstly, health” also does not form a clear transition into the paragraph. References such as “all this” and “it” are not always precise, making it less clear which benefits are being discussed. Use clearer topic sentences, group related examples, and add links that explain cause and effect rather than relying mainly on sequencing words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “vaccines,” “medications,” “diseases,” “technology,” and “standard of living,” and your examples make the general meaning understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, word-form and spelling errors reduce precision. Examples include “life spine” for life span, “good livings,” “precious gift of lives,” and “social medias.” There are also misspellings such as “wasy,” “coure,” and “preciocous.” Repetition of “science,” “life,” and “improve” further limits variety. Build a more accurate set of topic phrases and check spelling and natural combinations; for example, use “life expectancy,” “quality of life,” and “social media.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the main message is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors, however, occur in basic structures and in longer sentences. For example, “science has improve” needs a past participle, while “science has contribute” has the same verb-form problem. Agreement is also inconsistent in “all this are possible” and “Science also make.” Articles and singular/plural forms need attention in “one of the precious gift,” and the opening “to improve people’s lives should be the most important aim” is awkwardly constructed. Practise subject–verb agreement, present perfect forms, and countable nouns, then proofread each sentence. More accurate control of these patterns would make your argument clearer while retaining the sentence variety you attempt.

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