Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is widely argued that the most significant goal of science should be to improve people's lives. I mostly agree with the given statement because science made our life easier by providing advanced communication systems and improved medical facilities.

To begin with, the main aim of science should always be beneficial for mankind and indeed it did. First of all, the most significant benefit of science is that it provieds us better communication systems. In the past, we had to rely on traditional modes of communication, such as writing a letter and send it via post office, in order to communicate with our families, and friends. This form of communication took relatively a large period of time for getting a reply. With scientific breakthrough, now, this becomes easier and faster because wireless telecommunication systems made it possible to talk with our friends easily. Now, we can have a chat with our relatives within a short time even if we live far away because of the improved communication technology. For example, with the innovation of smartphones, such as Iphone, and Samsung, we can see our relatives through video applications and also we can get the real world up to date information and makes our lives better.

In addition, science provides us advanced medical technologies. Once we had to depend on natural treatments processes for panacea, such as meditation, yoga, and medicines that made from leaves of trees. But nowadays technological innovation made this process easier. With the advanced medical equipments, our health problems are easily detected and we can take proper treatments and medicines, which increases our life expectancy since using natural treatments involve some side effects. For instance, the invention of ECG enables us to measure our heart beat during difficult times and compares it with normal time for treatment purposes.

In conclusion, our lives can be improved by scientific innovation and that have to be the main goal of science. I mostly agree with this claim because science can made our lives easier by advancing communication modes and medical equipments.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction to the conclusion: you mostly agree that science should improve people’s lives, and you support this with communication and medical examples. These points are relevant, and the smartphone and ECG examples help make the discussion concrete. This meets the task well overall, but the argument is not equally developed throughout. The communication paragraph explains how faster contact helps, while the medical paragraph mainly lists detection and treatment benefits; the claim that natural treatments involve side effects is also asserted rather than explained. To strengthen the response, develop the reasoning behind each example and briefly acknowledge another possible aim of science before explaining why improving lives should remain its priority.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion that restates your view. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “In addition,” and “In conclusion” make the progression easy to follow. However, some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “First of all” after “To begin with,” and several sentences in the communication paragraph repeat the idea that technology makes contact easier and faster. Some references are also unclear, as in “this process” in the medical paragraph, where the reader must infer what process is meant. Use fewer formulaic transitions, connect each example directly to its main point, and make references more precise to improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “wireless telecommunication systems,” “medical technologies,” “life expectancy,” and “scientific innovation.” These choices help you discuss both areas relevant to the question, and the intended meaning is generally clear. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural choices that limit precision: “provieds” is misspelled, “panacea” does not fit the meaning of treatments, and “real world up to date information” is awkwardly expressed. Some phrases are also repetitive, especially “made our lives easier” and “advanced.” Aim for more accurate collocations and check spelling; choosing precise terms such as “medical procedures” or “diagnostic equipment” would make the discussion sound more natural and controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “which,” and “even if,” and the overall meaning remains understandable. Some sentences are well controlled, such as “This form of communication took relatively a large period of time for getting a reply,” though its phrasing could be more concise. Errors in verb forms and agreement recur: “science made our life easier,” “this becomes easier,” and “that have to be the main goal” do not maintain accurate tense or agreement. There are also problems with infinitive and clause structure, as in “writing a letter and send it” and “we can get … information and makes our lives better.” Review tense consistency, subject–verb agreement, and parallel forms, then proofread longer sentences for complete, correctly linked clauses.

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