Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The most important goal of the science is to enhance quality of humans life. I am totally agree with the statement that science will improve the humans lifes.

If we take a look on the life and the science, so the science is providing such facillities that makes our life better. For example if we talk about the transport in past the people used there donkeys and horses to travel it took lot of months to travel from one country to another and there was a lot of sufferings in the way, so nowadays the science create the multiple transports facilities like plane in which we can travel around the world in days not in weeks niether months and the planes contains a lot of facilities which keep humans away from sufferings like if there is an injury to a person so there is a medical staff to provide first aid and other things like food, entertainments. So these scientific innovations make people life much easier and improve the quality of human life.

If we talk about scientific innovation so it make much easier to diagnose and treat the different diseases and in future the science will innovate many more things that will treat uncurable diseases like cancer etc. Scientific developments like antibiotics which treats the diseases caused by different bacteria and completely vanishes the bacteria and gives us improve health incomes, however in past the bacteria caused many people to death so nowadays it is easy to manage multiple diseases.

In conclusion, i am totally agree with the aim of science is to improve the people lives by focusing on different sorts of innovation and developments.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening and conclusion: you fully agree that science should improve people’s lives. You support this with relevant examples from transport and medicine, including faster international travel, onboard assistance, antibiotics, and future treatment of serious diseases. These examples address the question directly and show a sound understanding of the topic. However, the discussion is not equally developed throughout: the transport paragraph includes several details, while the medical paragraph makes broad claims about antibiotics and future cures without explaining their impact as fully. To strengthen the response, develop each main reason with a clearer explanation and a specific, accurate example, and briefly acknowledge whether science may also have other important aims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present supporting reasons, and a conclusion restates your position. The examples are generally placed with the relevant point, so the reader can follow the main argument. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, particularly through repeated openings such as “If we talk about” and repeated references to “science.” Some long sentences also combine several ideas, making the progression less clear; the transport example moves from travel time to suffering, medical staff, food, and entertainment in one extended sequence. Use more varied transitions and divide complex explanations into shorter sentences. Clearer referencing, such as specifying what “these scientific innovations” refers to, would also improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your ideas, including “transport,” “diagnose,” “diseases,” “antibiotics,” and “scientific innovations.” These choices help make the examples relevant, and the meaning is generally understandable. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, as in “improve the humans lifes,” “multiple transports facilities,” and “improve health incomes.” There are also spelling errors, including “facillities,” “niether,” and “uncurable,” which reduce precision. Aim to learn common word partnerships and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general terms such as “things” and “make life better” with more precise expressions would give your argument greater flexibility and clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional phrasing such as “If we talk about scientific innovation…” and a relative clause in “the planes contains a lot of facilities which keep humans away from sufferings.” This shows an effort to vary sentence forms, and your main meaning is usually recoverable. However, some errors recur in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. For example, “the science” and “the planes contains” need grammatical adjustment, while “I am totally agree” should be “I totally agree.” Several sentences are very long and joined without clear punctuation, especially the transport example. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and article use, and separate linked ideas into controlled sentences.

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