Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Science should be used to improve human life most improtantly. I totaly agree to the statement, with the help of science we can protect planet and extend life expentancy of easily of rotting food.

In the recent years science has developed many inventions, some of which are used to consever and save the planet we are living in. For example we can reduce air pollution from the factories, crackers and not use products that contains CFC in them. By doing all of these we can ensure that the air we breath is safe and also protect the ozone layer from depleting. Recent studies have shown that some of the flora and fauna that are important to maintain the biological balance are getting extent or depleting. With the help of special research and conservation specialists we can collect these flora and fauna and preserve them in an controlled environment and make sure their count increases and the ecological balance is preserved.

There are some vegetables and fruits that spoil easily. With the help of genetic engineering and other farming techniques we can increase trhe shelf life of those produce. We can also preserve those vegetable, fruits and grains by keeping them in controlled environment and preserving them in solutions particullarly made to increase the shelf life of these products.

In conclution, I agree that science's most important aim should be improving people's life by protecting our planet earth by reducing pollution and use techniques that help in increasing shelf life of food and grains that will help in longitivity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening—“I totally agree”—and the response stays focused on ways science can benefit people and the environment. You provide relevant examples, including reducing pollution, protecting the ozone layer, conserving species, and extending the shelf life of food. These points address the topic, but the connection between them and the claim that improving people’s lives is science’s most important aim could be explained more explicitly. The food-preservation example is relevant but receives limited development, and the discussion of conservation focuses more on ecological balance than on its direct benefits to people. Explain how each example improves health, security, or quality of life, and develop the reasoning more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present examples, and a conclusion restates your position. The progression from environmental protection to food preservation is easy to follow, and phrases such as “For example” and “With the help of” help connect ideas. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some features of stronger organisation. However, repeated use of “With the help of” makes the linking somewhat mechanical, and some sentences contain several related points without clearly showing how they connect. For instance, the pollution examples and the ozone-layer point could be linked more explicitly. Use a wider range of transitions and clearer references to guide the reader between claims and their consequences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “ozone layer,” “genetic engineering,” “flora and fauna,” and “ecological balance.” This gives you enough range to discuss the subject, and several less common terms are appropriate. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “improtantly,” “consever,” “extent,” and “longitivity.” Some expressions are also unnatural or unclear, such as “extend life expectancy of easily of rotting food” and “preserving them in solutions particularly made.” These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your main ideas, but they make parts of the response less fluent. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for discussing food preservation and environmental protection.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including sentences with “which” clauses and conditional structures such as “we can ensure that the air we breathe is safe.” Most ideas remain understandable, and the response includes some successful sentence patterns. There are, however, some errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and plurals. For example, “products that contains CFC” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “in an controlled environment” uses the wrong article. The opening sentence, “we can protect planet and extend life expectancy of easily of rotting food,” is difficult to follow because its grammatical relationships are unclear. Review agreement and article use, and revise long sentences so each clause has a clear subject and purpose.

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