Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

nowdays science play an important role in people lives people belive that The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. i strongly agree with this statement it improve te people life easier and also help in health and education sector.

firstly science makes our lives easier and conivenent for example in th past people had to do of their work by hand which took lot of time and effort howerver now science introducce the mordern machines and technology for example refrigator, computers and washing machines have done the houshold and office work much easier. and human complete their in less time. In addition people can communicate with their family or friends through mobile phone and internet. even if they live in different countries.

Secondly, science has major improvement in medical field . In the past people died becuae doctor have no proper medicine and medical equipments. but now science has invented many mordern medicine and medical equippment which help doctor to treat well. for example doctor used x ray and MRI machine to find the health problems they give the proper treatment to patients. Morever commute is also easily through the science . in the past people used the aniamls for travelling . they can easily travell by airplane, electric train. People reached on designation within the few time.

Futhermore, Science also improve the education sector. it provide the online classes for people who can not go to institute. and prefer to remote study. Therefore, it help in education , provide different types of infomation and learn new skill . its also help to develope the personailty and give the advice .

In conclusion that , I strong agree that improving the people lives should be aim of science. it provide different facilities which makes the lives easier , comfortable and convienent therefore scientific reaserach mainly focus on people need and benefits of human being,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction (“i strongly agree”) and conclusion, and you address the question with relevant reasons: convenience in daily life, medical advances, transport and education. Examples such as washing machines, MRI machines and online classes help make the argument concrete. This meets the task well, with some elements showing the fuller development expected at a stronger level. However, the education point is brief and general, and the transport discussion is added within the medical paragraph rather than developed as a distinct reason. Some claims, such as science helping people “develope the personailty,” are not explained. Extend these points by showing specifically how each benefit improves people’s lives and support them with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate body paragraphs signalled by “firstly,” “Secondly” and “Futhermore,” and a conclusion. The main ideas generally progress from everyday convenience to health, transport and education, so the reader can follow the argument. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical, however, because paragraphs rely heavily on sequence markers and repeated “and” or “also.” The medical paragraph shifts to transport without a clear transition, while the education paragraph contains several loosely connected points. Some references, such as “it” and “they,” do not always make their intended subject clear. Group related examples together, use more precise referencing, and connect each paragraph’s examples directly to its main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “medical field,” “treatment,” “online classes,” “technology” and “scientific research.” There are also attempts at more specific terms, such as “MRI machine” and “electric train.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling and collocation errors make parts less clear or natural: “conivenent,” “mordern medicine,” “reached on designation,” and “provide different types of infomation.” Repetition of “science,” “people” and “lives” also limits flexibility. Build accuracy with common academic collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “reach their destination” rather than “reached on designation,” and “medical equipment” rather than “medical equippment.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “which,” “for example” and “even if.” This gives the response some structural variety, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “science play” and “it improve,” where subject–verb agreement is missing, and “people had to do of their work,” where the sentence pattern is faulty. Articles and sentence boundaries are also problematic, as in “in th past” and the run-on sequence “Therefore, it help in education, provide different types of infomation and learn new skill.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine ideas using correctly formed subordinate clauses and consistent verb forms.

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