Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this era of modernity, we cannot live a single moment without science. We can live a balance life with the help of science in several ways. I am firmly agree with the view that, improve our lives should be the most significant aim of science and I will elaborate my stance in the following paragraphs along with an appropiate conclusion.

To support my agreement with the given statement, I strongly believe that science can save our time in many ways, such as in studying, working, searching information, travelling and so on. For example, we can save our time by using AI for our research. A student need to spent hours to extract informations from any paper or artical, whereas AI can do the same task in a minute. As a result, they can focus on other things.

Discussing another supporting argument in favor of my statement that it is evident that science is helping to improve our environment and society. Science produce so many tools and technology, which participant in possitive changes in our society. Such as electric cars for travel, electric cleaner for cleaning, smartphones for communicating and so on. By using these technology of science we can ensure the quality of our environment and can improve our living. Additionally, government are more likely to do some improvement in our society with the help of modern science.

In conclusion, science is always helping to improve our life and society and it never disappoints of doing this. So, we have to admit this and always use the best part of the technology.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you firmly agree that improving people’s lives should be science’s main aim, and both body paragraphs give relevant reasons. The examples of AI helping with research and electric cars or smartphones make the discussion concrete. However, the reasons are not developed equally: the time-saving point is illustrated, but the claim that science improves the environment and society is broad, and the examples are listed rather than explained. The statement that governments use science to improve society is also left unsupported. To strengthen the response, explain how each example improves people’s lives and consider the scope of “most important,” perhaps acknowledging other aims of science before reaffirming your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present supporting reasons, and a conclusion restates your position. Linking expressions such as “For example,” “As a result,” and “Additionally” help readers follow the argument, and the progression from saving time to wider social benefits is understandable. This meets the lower-band expectations and shows some movement towards more flexible organisation. However, several transitions sound mechanical, particularly “Discussing another supporting argument in favor of my statement,” and the second body paragraph combines environmental, social, and government-related claims without clearly connecting them. Use simpler topic sentences and develop one main idea at a time, with clearer links between each claim and its example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including topic-related terms such as “AI,” “electric cars,” “technology,” and “environment.” There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, for example “significant aim” and “supporting argument.” However, range and precision are limited, and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. Examples include “live a balance life,” “science produce so many tools,” and “never disappoints of doing this”; spelling errors such as “appropiate,” “informations,” and “artical” also reduce accuracy. Aim for natural collocations and check word forms and spelling. More precise vocabulary for describing outcomes—such as efficiency, access, or reduced emissions—would help you explain your examples more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “whereas” and a result clause beginning “As a result.” Most of the argument remains understandable, and the response has a recognisable sentence structure. Some grammatical errors persist, however, particularly with agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “I am firmly agree” should be “I firmly agree,” “A student need to spent” should be “A student needs to spend,” and “Science produce” should be “Science produces.” The opening phrase “I am firmly agree with the view that, improve our lives…” also needs restructuring. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, and use punctuation to separate introductory phrases from the main clause.

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