Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, science technology plays a vital role in our daily lives, they can help in every matter through their digital technology, people can gain benefits from them such as in rural and urban areas and their all industrial areas.I fully agree with this statement.

Firstly,the science technology for more helpful for every human beings lives, they can help women in their daily household works like in kitchen equipments and cleaning services, like for male gender science can helps people in their work places such as in industrial area and factories located in urban and rural areas at that places people can work more precisely then the previous science technology, in past decades the amount of facilities was limited in thats places then people use their physical potential so they can helped people for keep fresh and healthy, but they also have lots of disadvantages like if people not physically fit as compared to other so they did not lifted so much weight as result they suffered from serious bone injury.

Secondly they today science technology can beneficial for every person no matter they are poor or weak,However, people come their daily work places with better transportation systems for their better locomotion,ambulances can hepls nowadays with better potential thats the parts of science technology in which all equipments are exicted which useful for patients in emergency conditions so they gain helps from this opportunity. On the other hand most of people utilize this for crime and disturbed the system of cyber security, we should be aware of disaster.

In conclusion, science has more beneficial opportunities for every human beings if they use this in illegal way we should not pushing ourselfes in bad depth related to this. Morever, the has a lots of disadvantages if people use it for creaying problems, we should stop this disaster from our enviornments .then science improved our life styles with better quality.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the opening—“I fully agree”—and the response gives relevant examples, including household equipment, industrial work, transport and ambulances. These show an understanding that science can improve daily life and support people in emergencies. However, the discussion only partly develops the task: several examples are listed without explaining in detail how they improve people’s lives, and the point about cybercrime is introduced but not connected clearly to your overall argument. The conclusion also shifts between science’s benefits and its misuse without firmly resolving the extent of your agreement. To strengthen the response, explain each main example and its impact, and make the counterpoint about harmful uses support, rather than blur, your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly” and “In conclusion” help identify its broad structure. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several different points are joined into long sentences. For example, the first body paragraph moves from household tasks to factories, past physical work and injuries without clear separation or a consistent line of development. Some links are also unclear: “On the other hand” introduces cybercrime, but the relationship between this contrast and the preceding discussion is not fully explained. Use one central idea per paragraph, divide supporting points into shorter sentences, and make references such as “this” or “they” clearly identify what they mean.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “transportation systems,” “cyber security,” “emergency conditions” and “industrial area.” This gives you some means of discussing science’s effects in different settings. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “people,” “help” and “science technology,” while several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear—for example, “better potential,” “gain helps” and “bad depth.” Spelling errors such as “exicted,” “enviornments” and “Morever” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling and natural word combinations; this will help you express the examples without relying on repeated or vague wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and connectives, but complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some points difficult to follow. The opening joins two independent clauses with a comma: “science technology plays …, they can help.” There are also recurring problems with agreement and verb forms, as in “science can helps” and “they did not lifted,” as well as articles and sentence construction in “the science technology for more helpful.” Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and sentences that run on. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after auxiliaries, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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