Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Due to of the important aim of science to grow up the people's lives, i couldn't agree more the science are a big impact in our mind for example if the people they didn't study or read book they can not speaking with people and make a dicision and thinging and get work it will be all the people unemployment , however the science make as literacy and it give as the énergy in our live for exemple i was stayed one month without studing and reading i felt i can't thinking and i can't writing with my hand , in other hand i'm disagree when the people used the science for bad things like it make you take the decision in bad way for exemple i have friend he was intelligend and he taked a best level in education of pscycology than he can influent of the people with his information , and he stilll use this technique because he can know any people how can thing with some questions and he can make him change his decision or take some information about his mind .on conclure , the science is the best tool for live with people and can talk

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position—“i couldn't agree more”—and give relevant points about education and the possible misuse of scientific knowledge. The example of your psychology friend also shows an attempt to support your view with a personal case. However, the response only partially addresses the question: it does not clearly explain what “improve people’s lives” means or weigh science’s benefits against its risks. Several ideas, such as literacy and employment, are asserted rather than explained, and the conclusion is too brief to reinforce your argument. The response is 48 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop reasons and examples. Expand each main point with a clear explanation and a specific link to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic line of thought: you support science’s benefits, introduce a concern about harmful uses, and finish with a conclusion. Connectors such as “however,” “in other hand,” and “on conclure” show an effort to guide the reader. At times, though, the response reads as one long sequence, with several different claims joined together rather than organised into clear paragraphs. The relationship between studying, literacy, employment, and the personal example is not always explicit, and “in other hand” does not clearly signal how the next point contrasts with the previous one. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and counterpoint, and make each paragraph develop one central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary related to the topic, including “science,” “education,” “psychology,” “decision,” and “information,” and you try to express abstract ideas about literacy and influence. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow, as in “grow up the people's lives,” “make as literacy,” and “the best tool for live with people.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “dicision,” “thinging,” “intelligend,” and “influ ent” also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than translating expressions word for word. Learning topic-specific combinations such as “improve quality of life” and “apply scientific knowledge” would help you express your ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, including a conditional structure beginning “if the people they didn't study” and a contrast introduced by “however.” This shows some willingness to use more than simple sentence patterns. However, many sentences contain errors in clause structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation, which sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. For example, “the science are a big impact” has an agreement and sentence-pattern problem, while “he taked a best level” uses an incorrect past form and article. The response also relies heavily on run-on sentences. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then join them with correctly formed clauses and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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