Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Might be heared about the Necessity is the mother of invention the aim of the human race goes through the advancements and achivements in sciences for their better lives so here we discuss the science should be to improve people,s lives in many aspects from the next coming paragraph.
Development of technology and science that provide people,s lot of benifits through many aspects like the advanced hospital machines used to detect the problems in paitences and other diseases which are not possible through the doctors. nowdays nanobotos has been used for cure the paitences and there is becoming the less chance of avoding the surgery. Another thing the science can give us the pure and green energy if we make it that way ,while when we see todays world sciences has give us much more the we expect ,the research and discoveries that has vanished long ago the sciences alive them through research and discoveries of the past civilizations .
On the other hand the drawback of the sciences has also as we see the excessive use of any thing is bad whether it is science or tool of the inventions as humans developement in space of their research they made up thier the space stations and lot of stallites are through into the space like the waste material , another thing the technology of internet ,eg mobile towers high bems of eltro magnetic waves effects the other species through networking and signaling .
in conclusion, the sciences will be improve peoples lives , through reasearch , discovers and give the green energy ,life hackes that improve and effect the daily lives.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the role of science in improving human lives. However, the position is not consistently clear throughout the essay. While you mention benefits like medical advancements and green energy, the development of these ideas is limited and sometimes lacks focus. For instance, the mention of 'past civilizations' is tangential and does not directly support the argument. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your arguments are fully extended with relevant examples rather than just listed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow between and within them is often disjointed. The transition between the benefits of science and the drawbacks is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'from the next coming paragraph' or 'another thing'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'heared', 'achivements', 'benifits', 'paitences', 'nanobotos', and 'eltro'. Additionally, word choice is often imprecise; for example, 'science alive them' is not standard English. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use less common items effectively. To reach a higher band, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and practice using collocations (words that naturally go together) rather than translating directly from your native language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that affect readability. There are persistent issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and fragments (e.g., 'Might be heared about...'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are frequently incorrect, such as 'the sciences will be improve' and 'the drawback of the sciences has also'. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and pluralization before attempting more complex structures.
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