Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
I believe that science must try to provide beneficial resources for the people to make the life more easier and comfortable for a long period of life.
Not only because the aim of science can help you in advancement in modern technology like solar panel, electric transport, and improvement in medical sciences.
There are multiple benefits associated with having solar panel because it generates electricity from the natural resources like sun. As by using solar panel its reduce the expenditure of electricity. We can use solar panel in like desert areas or sea areas where they do not have access of electricity with this we can also utilize those areas.
It also have diverse affect on increasing the global warming but science also working in that area how to minimize the worlds temperature that seems like impossible.
Secondly, the inventions of electric transport is one the most demanding development. In today worlds, face the shortage of fuel. As we know the resources of oil reduces day by day and that is the reason why fuel rate increase day by day and with the help of this it reduce the consumption of fuel and it also provide pollution free environment.
Thirdly, with the collaboration of interdisciplinary fields of research making the new development in medical sciences like MRI, CT scan, etc. The development in science in those areas which helps to detect the diagnose of following diseases in early stage to recover the patients to save their lives. We can also remove kidney stone by using modern technology like laser without surgery.
Thus, these modern inventions of science might be negative impacts on the environment, humans being, etc. So that is why the purpose of science should be betterment peoples life by research on modern and advance technology. As we also know that the population increases day by day so science should find alternative of this.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by arguing that science should focus on improving lives, citing examples like solar energy, electric transport, and medical advancements. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the discussion on solar panels and global warming is disjointed, and the link between the prompt and the examples is occasionally tenuous. The position is clear, but the argument lacks the depth required for a higher band. The conclusion introduces new ideas about population growth that were not previously discussed, which disrupts the logical flow of the argument. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed point that directly supports your thesis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression between and within them is often weak. While transition words like 'Secondly' and 'Thirdly' are used, they feel mechanical. Some sentences are poorly connected, such as the transition from solar panels to global warming, which lacks a clear logical link. Referencing is sometimes unclear, for example, 'with the help of this it reduce the consumption of fuel'—it is not immediately obvious what 'this' refers to. The paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs needs to be more cohesive to guide the reader effectively through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'make the life more easier' (should be 'make life easier') and 'detect the diagnose of following diseases' (should be 'diagnose the following diseases'). The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic terms. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise collocations and academic vocabulary. For example, instead of 'make the life more easier', use 'enhance the quality of life' or 'improve living standards'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('it also have diverse affect', 'it reduce the consumption'), article usage ('in today worlds'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. For example, 'Not only because the aim of science can help you in advancement in modern technology...' is an incomplete sentence. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses.
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