Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
in this task 2 , i going respond with positive and at the same time negative side of science aim to individual's lives. if we going to divide it by extent , it will readable and understeable to catch the main point of my view. the first extent will include that science should improve our lifestyle in tech or assist with cash to universities if someone have finansial issue or with antibiotics. in our lige there are many people who can not handle with alcahol and cigarates , they have to find any way to solve this problem . i highly mentioned about thing which one neccesery to look and solve , i will give them agreement for this. the other side which one really goes beyond the boundaries are really frustrated many peoples with no effect. it can be lack of power , tree, information and something like this which one belong to their job. for example, if science will not do own job many people will need in information , facts too. from my life i am really carefully prson so i want to say that aall information already given to us through nature hovewer many of them stay not learned , if science will give more attention to nature taey should notice all of this and make some verdict to there question which one interstion.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument, the ideas are underdeveloped and often unclear. For example, the mention of 'cash to universities' and 'antibiotics' is too brief to constitute a well-supported argument. Furthermore, the second paragraph is difficult to follow, making it hard to identify a clear, consistent position. To improve, you must expand your points with specific examples and ensure your argument is logically structured throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no clear paragraphing, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'the first extent' and 'the other side', but they are used mechanically and do not effectively link your arguments. Referencing is often unclear, such as in the phrase 'which one belong to their job', where the antecedent is ambiguous. To improve, focus on using clear topic sentences for each paragraph and ensure that each idea flows logically into the next using a wider variety of linking words.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Your vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are numerous spelling errors, such as 'finansial', 'lige', 'alcahol', 'cigarates', and 'neccesery'. Additionally, word choices like 'highly mentioned about thing' and 'make some verdict to there question' are unnatural and imprecise. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more academic collocations and ensure you are using words in their correct context. Focus on proofreading your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often cause difficulty for the reader. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'if someone have'), tense usage (e.g., 'i going respond'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them hard to parse. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are consistently faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and correct verb tenses, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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