Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

From many past decades, science has been not in the people's lives as they all relied on the home made and old talks peoples used to have. After decades of generation pasted and science came in the picture things got changed when a practical and logical answers came for questions.

In old age, the most significant achievements in science done in the medical and health care sectors but now in the 21st century science has been a rocket to the world. science is improving the people's lives as knowledge, employment, frictions memory, agriculture and many.

science advanced their technologies in the agriculture as high yield crops and farmers machines which helped and made easy for farmers daily hard-working life. science came in education as the AI learning, Practical mechanism for the students.

I agree with the statement" the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives". Still there are many pros and cons of the science too as it is helpful at the same time it is dangerous as many people use science for their self-greed and to earn illegal money because science is a so big in this decade where it helps peoples too grow, learn, and make themself better

For me, science took a most important role in my space studies as it makes me realise that how a thing can be looks so unreal. science made me practice in realistic way in the machines and more technologies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by stating a position, but the development is limited and lacks depth. While you mention agriculture and education, the points are underdeveloped and lack specific, illustrative examples. The essay fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop ideas as required for higher bands. The argument regarding the 'pros and cons' is somewhat tangential to the core question of whether the 'most important aim' should be to improve lives. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, sustained argument with well-supported examples for each main point.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often disjointed. Transitions between sentences are frequently missing or mechanical, such as the abrupt shift between the introduction and the body paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, making the flow of ideas feel repetitive. For instance, the start of each paragraph lacks a clear topic sentence that links back to the central thesis. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') would help create a more cohesive and professional structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'science has been a rocket to the world' and 'frictions memory', which impede clarity. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. You rely on simple, repetitive words like 'science', 'people', and 'things'. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate rather than literal translations or vague descriptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often interfere with meaning. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'science has been not in the people's lives'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'After decades of generation pasted'), and awkward sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of quotation marks and commas. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often grammatically flawed. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like articles and verb forms will help improve your accuracy significantly.

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