Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is considered that science should be mainly focus to improve people's lives than anything else. I personally agree with this statement because improving lives of individuals will make them able to change the world.
In my opinion, it is necessary for science to work for the betterment of human beings and their lives. Science should adopt the measurements to sustain better human growth by introducing them with new technologies, opportunities and better treatments of diseases. As it it will make them able to fulfill their dreams and achieve success. However, it will benefit them with the ability of revolutionizing the world. For example, when science provides better job opportunities to people, they have a chance to show their skills and abilities in a specific field and to earn bread and butter for their families as well. By doing work rather then being free is also very important for their health and it can give them chance to serve their countries.
On the other hand, some people believe that science should focus on other things e.g. inventing new technologies and models to win the world. They have great interest in revealing the secrets of nature and they eagerly want to know about many other things present in nature. For example, if science will invent new things they can have better options to choose fields and opportunities for earning but this is somehow is beneficial for mankind. So it is also improving human lives in a way. Science can focus on other aspects of life but it's main focus should be on the improvement of lives of mankind.
In conclusion, the achievements of science should be beneficial for mankind whether in any aspect.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding 'earning bread and butter' is a bit simplistic and lacks a strong connection to the broader scientific context. While the essay covers both sides of the argument, the discussion on 'revealing the secrets of nature' is slightly repetitive and lacks depth. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific, concrete examples of scientific advancements—such as medical breakthroughs or renewable energy—rather than relying on general statements about job opportunities or 'winning the world'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'In my opinion', 'However', and 'On the other hand', to signal shifts in your argument. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'As it it will make them able to fulfill their dreams'. The flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their intended antecedents to avoid ambiguity.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. You rely on somewhat informal or repetitive phrasing, such as 'earn bread and butter' and 'win the world'. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'adopt the measurements' (which is not the correct collocation for 'implementing strategies' or 'adopting measures'). To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to scientific progress and societal impact, while avoiding informal idioms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'science should be mainly focus' (should be 'focused'), 'As it it will' (repetition), and 'rather then' (should be 'than'). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement throughout the text. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for basic verb forms and prepositions would be highly beneficial.
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