Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The role of science in today's fact paced world is understated, scientific breakthroughs in different fields have led to improvements for our daily lives. Some believe that the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives, while some argue that it shouldn't be the main focus. I believe that every scientists first priority should be to make advancements in people's lives.

One of the ways that science can improve people's live is by allowing more funds and resource to go towards diseases that don't have a cure yet such as cancer, it has affected millions of people throughout the years and there's not a cure yet, if companies start to allocate more resources for cancer's research they can help countless people from losing their loved ones. Another way that science can improve our lives, is by making simple task autonomous, such tasks that needs to be done everyday such as cleaning and driving. By making these types of task automated people can have more time to be productive and safe their energy.

On the other hand, by allowing more scientists to focus on their field of speciality and make advancements there they can indirect benefit people's lives, such as when astronauts were first launched into space they were equipped with diapers which were later on made form baby and for people with bladder problem which made lives easier. Many scientists accidently perform an experiment with the wrong ingredients or taken the wrong measurements which created something that can improve our lives.

In conclusion, I believe that the benefits of improving our lives through science outweigh the needs of making new advancements in other fields.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. You have provided relevant examples, such as medical research and automation, to support your argument. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The second body paragraph, which discusses 'accidental' scientific discoveries, is less clearly linked to the main argument about the 'most important aim' of science. To reach a higher band, ensure that every supporting point directly reinforces your central thesis. The conclusion is also quite brief and could have better synthesised the main points discussed in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organised into clear paragraphs, and there is a progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'On the other hand' and 'In conclusion', to link your thoughts. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. Additionally, some sentences are run-on, such as the first sentence of the second paragraph, which impacts the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences are punctuated correctly would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'scientific breakthroughs', 'autonomous', and 'speciality'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'safe their energy' (save their energy) and 'made form baby' (made for babies). The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. To improve, focus on learning collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a positive step. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('every scientists first priority' should be 'every scientist's first priority') and punctuation, specifically comma splices. For example, '...cancer, it has affected...' should be two separate sentences or joined by a semicolon. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to limit your score in this criterion.

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