Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Today,s topic is about the science and mostly scientists says that the most essential goal of science should be provide the better life to people.
Basically, I am agreed with this statement and in this essay explaining some advantages of the science in the humans lives. The first the science is an only thing that helped the people to touch the moon and go out through the earth. For example Elon Musk is one if wealthy man in the world and he also sent his rockets on the moon and he is only succeed in his aim due to science and now his name is highlight in the list of world biggest rich men.
The second benefits of science using technology in the schools and also in other education institutes. In the present era the study is on the high stage as compare to past because in the past the science was very lack in the the education but nowadays every school has a science lab and daily students goes there and work with the practical items.
The third facility of science is in the travelling if a man and a woman to go to another city or in country then he no need to spend many days on in the travel. He has just sit in the plane and he saw another country after few hours. So science helped us to consume little time on the roads.
The fourth benefit of the science is information technology that help us to communicate with people all over the world in a very small time. So we not necessary to remain away from our friends.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by agreeing that science should improve lives. However, the development of ideas is limited. The example of Elon Musk is somewhat tangential, as it focuses on personal wealth rather than the broader societal benefits of science. The points regarding education, travel, and communication are relevant but remain at a superficial level, lacking depth or specific evidence to support the argument. To improve, you should focus on explaining 'how' and 'why' science improves lives, rather than simply listing benefits. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments need more elaboration to meet the requirements for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'The first the science is an only thing' and 'The second benefits of science'. The progression of ideas is somewhat repetitive, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt. While there is an overall attempt at logical flow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the reliance on simple, repetitive structures ('The first', 'The second', 'The third') hinder the coherence of the essay. Improving the variety of transition signals would significantly enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts the ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of awkward word choice and phrasing, such as 'science was very lack in the the education' and 'practical items'. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is little attempt to use less common or more precise terminology. To improve, you should focus on learning collocations and topic-specific vocabulary related to science and technology. Additionally, there are frequent errors in word formation and usage that occasionally make the meaning slightly unclear, though the general message remains understandable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with articles ('the science', 'the humans lives'), subject-verb agreement ('scientists says'), and verb tense/form ('he no need to spend', 'he has just sit'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and apostrophes ('Today,s'). While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex structures.
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