Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Many people think that improving people's lives should be the most crucial objective of science and i completely agree with this view because science has the potential to exchange risky human jobs with artificial intelligence and incorporate sophisticated technology in everyday life to make everything effortless.

One of the major capability of science is to exchange life threatening works with automation or AI. There are many jobs that require workers to endanger their lives for the shake of the society such as, construction of high rise buildings or mining in isolated and dangerous places. These tasks can be done by robots or AI without harming anybody with proper investment and research in these fields. This way human involvement in such jobs can be significantly reduced. For example, at present mining in difficult regions are observed and done by robot and AI at first. If its safe to go inside then workers are sent for better effort. Moreover, these research would create more employment opportunities in the future, helping unemployment to reduce.

Another capability of science to make our lives easier is the invention of new technologies. Science has created amazing technologies like mobile, computer, IoTs and digital services to transform our daily tasks. For instance, we can connect to our loved ones living in another part of the world in seconds. Moreover, the digital services have make our lives fast paced with everything happening very effortlessly. As a result, our quality of life has improved significantly compared to before when we did not have science and its inventions. However, disadvantages can also be noticed such as too much screen time, privacy issues and carbon footprint. People with negative intension can turn science into a curse. Therefore we need regulations from authority to control it and this way we science can stick to its aim of improving people's lives.

In conclusion, i agree that science's most important aim should be to improve people's lives with AI and automation in risky fields and invention of useful technologies in our daily lives with regulations to have a control on its usages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. You have provided relevant arguments regarding the role of science in automation and technological advancement. The ideas are generally well-developed, though the discussion on the 'disadvantages' in the third paragraph is slightly tangential to the main prompt, which asks about the 'aim' of science. To reach a higher band, ensure that every point made directly supports your stance on whether improving lives should be the primary goal. The conclusion effectively summarizes your position, though it could be more nuanced.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. You use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'For instance', and 'As a result' to link sentences. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between the discussion of benefits and the mention of regulations could be smoother. Referencing is generally clear, but ensure that pronouns like 'it' consistently refer back to the intended noun to avoid ambiguity.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'sophisticated technology', 'fast-paced', and 'carbon footprint'. There are some instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'exchange' instead of 'replace' or 'substitute', and 'shake' instead of 'sake'. Additionally, 'make our lives fast paced' is slightly awkward. While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, there are occasional errors in collocation that slightly hinder the precision of your expression. Expanding your range of academic collocations would improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'One of the major capability' (should be 'capabilities'), 'these research would' (should be 'this research would'), and 'digital services have make' (should be 'have made'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor slips in capitalization (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'). The frequency of these errors suggests that while you can communicate complex ideas, your control over grammatical accuracy needs more consistency.

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