Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Science has given us greatest of innovations through out the history and still amaze us with new discoveries. All these development helped us to grow for betterment towards our survival. I believe our universe is linked with science. Everything that happens is somehow related to science.
Firstly, Science has defined the existence of all living creature known to mankind. Humans evolution from monkey to an advance thinking ability creature led to so many new innovations, millions of species has been discovered by humans with the help of science. Today we understand all the species anatomy, that help us to provide medical assistance. Doctors in today's world are the contribution of medical science. We can treat all types of animals or birds because of science and the break through behind it.
Secondly, In the field of science, so many new advancement and invention had took place. We have airplanes, which is very helpful in covering long distance in shortest time possible, then we have telephones, with we can connect to anyone across nations in fraction of seconds. We have new development in energy sector like solar panel, Grid automation, Grid integration to minimize the carbon foot print and reduce dependance on fossil fuels. Science is the foundation of all this innovations.
Overall, i would like to conclude with the points that science had led to the discoveries of all the species and growth in understanding the medical science to treat all living beings adequately. At the same time, it had made so many advances in technology with phones, heavy machines and energy boom that made our lives more sustainable and better.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the role of science in improving lives, but the position is not fully developed. While you provide examples of medical and technological advancements, the essay lacks a clear, consistent argument regarding the 'extent' of your agreement. The ideas are relevant but remain somewhat descriptive rather than analytical. To improve, ensure you explicitly state your position in the introduction and maintain a clear line of argument throughout the body paragraphs. The conclusion summarizes the points well but does not add further insight or reinforce the central thesis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Overall' to signal the structure. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally weak, such as in the phrase 'with we can connect', which disrupts the logical flow. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that the transition between ideas is smoother and more sophisticated.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'innovations', 'anatomy', and 'sustainability'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'greatest of innovations' (should be 'the greatest innovations'), 'advance thinking ability creature' (should be 'advanced thinking creatures'), and 'energy boom'. These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the precision of your writing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations and refining your control over word forms will help improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('millions of species has been discovered'), tense errors ('had took place'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to keep the score in the 5.5 to 6.0 range. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent verb tense usage throughout your paragraphs.
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