Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this period of technology, many people are aussiming that the goal of science and technology should be to improve lives of peoples. Nowadays, Science and technology are morely focus on developing things that can destory our earth. However , in my view, i strongly agree on this notion and my opinion will be discussed in further paragraphs with a suitable conclusion.
Supporting my agreement to the given statement, i firmly believe that Science should aim to improve peoples lives with improving technology to help people or to make easier lives. To cite an example, Science are developing Artificial Intelligence which makes people lives even better, AI can help you in every path of peoples lives by telling you what to do according to the situtation. For instance, AI could also be your friend to share your emotions.
Explainig some of the another supporting points in favour against this statement, it is true that science are also more focused on exploring the world, but on the other hand it is also helping peoples lives get better byhelping in medicines. For example, if people who does not have arm and leg can get a artificial arms and legs . As a result, it was helping people in different situtations.`
In conclusion, science have to focus on improving peoples lives more than exprementing on other animals. I believe that aforementioned pionts are strong and supporting my viewpoint.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which negatively impacts the development of ideas. While you state a clear position, the arguments are underdeveloped and repetitive. For example, the point about AI is vague, and the mention of medical prosthetics is a good start but lacks sufficient elaboration to fully explore the 'extent' of your agreement. To improve, you must expand your supporting arguments with more detailed explanations and specific examples, ensuring you meet the length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While you use some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'For instance', their usage is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Explainig some of the another supporting points in favour against this statement'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences is disjointed. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic sentence that connects logically to your overall argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'aussiming' (assuming), 'morely' (mostly), and 'exprementing' (experimenting). You rely on basic vocabulary, and there is a lack of precision in your expression. For instance, 'developing things that can destory our earth' is quite simplistic. To improve, you should practice using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to science and technology. Expanding your vocabulary through reading academic texts will help you express your ideas with greater clarity and sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Science are developing', 'science have to focus') and article usage. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'if people who does not have arm and leg can get a artificial arms and legs'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and proofreading for common errors in pluralization and article usage.
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