Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given line chart provides information about percentage of the citizens in cities in four different Asia countries in the period from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.
The every country in the graph facing the growth or Negligily decline in every year. The Malaysia has been faced the most signifactly grow in comparison with the other 3 countries. Moreover, Indonesia which contained the lowest number of citizens in the beginning, sharply grown by the end of period.
The Philippines at the beginning contained over 31% of local people, and did not changed until 1990, then the model rose dramatically to over 50% of total poplutaion which is more than previous result to about 19%. But, after this, the model being gradually drop to an over 40% of citizens in 2010. Moreover, the predictions says that in the future Philippines will be back to 50% of total population.
Furthermore, Malaysia which being second in 1970 with over 30% of population has been faced significatly increase over the years, and got the dominance with over 77% of total population in 2020.
Also, Thailand had over 18% of citizens in 1970, gradually grown and increased to about 27% amount of people in 1990. But after this period, model rose steadily, and after 2020 sharply grown to over 40% of total population on 2040. Indonesia also shown very good result, at the beginning it has the lowest number of citizens, but over the years of growth, in 2010 it became the second highest country with percentage of total population, placing The Philippes to third place, and after the end of period it contains over 54% of total population.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 1.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for an essay discussing whether the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives, but the student has written a report describing a line chart about urban population percentages. Because the student failed to address the task prompt entirely, this response cannot be assessed for Task Response in the context of the essay question. In an official IELTS examination, this would be treated as a memorized or irrelevant response, resulting in a very low score for Task Achievement as the task requirements were not met.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, and there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Also'. However, the logical progression is hindered by the fact that the content does not match the task. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'the model' being used to refer to population percentages. While there is a basic structure, the lack of relevance to the prompt makes the overall coherence difficult to evaluate in a standard academic context.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Negligily' (negligible), 'signifactly' (significantly), 'poplutaion' (population), and 'Philippes' (Philippines). The range of vocabulary is adequate for describing trends, using terms like 'dramatically', 'gradually', and 'sharply', but the frequent spelling mistakes and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'the model being gradually drop') limit the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The every country in the graph facing the growth', 'did not changed', and 'predictions says'. There is a lack of control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. While there is an attempt to use complex sentence structures, they are often faulty, such as 'Indonesia also shown very good result, at the beginning it has the lowest number of citizens'. The frequency of these errors is high.
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