Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the curent era science is contributing most to the society by making life more easier for all individuals and i completely agree that this should be the aim of science to improve daily life of the people.

It is quite evident that science have already improved the daily life and work of people such providing the opportunity get every thing on their door steps like shopping from different location while sitting in their homes. For example a report is published in USA in 2020, that says almost 90 percent of people do shpping online from different stores located far from them.

Secondly, the online work also have increased where people can work in different countries without even going out of their homes which resulted in increasing jobs around the globe. For example in Netherlands there are more than 50 world recognised business operating from India countributing to the economy of both the countries.

Furthermore science also made students life much more easier as they can access the information and learn from the best by just using internet platforms and improve their skills to an extreme level. For example in Australia there are more than 5000 students registered to the top univeristy' s online courses from all over the world.

In conclusion i would say that the science has improved people's lives and contributing to that cause. In near future it will resulst in the job market of the world by providing numerous jobs to the skiiled workers. So yes for sure the most important aim of science is to improve lives of people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of the statement. While the main ideas—online shopping, remote work, and online education—are relevant, they are somewhat repetitive in their focus on 'convenience' and 'ease.' The development is adequate, but the examples provided (e.g., the 90% statistic for US shopping or the 5000 students in Australia) feel slightly generic or lack sufficient depth to fully explore the 'extent' of the argument. To reach a higher band, you should consider counter-arguments or discuss the potential negative impacts of science to provide a more balanced and nuanced perspective.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'It is quite evident,' 'Secondly,' 'Furthermore,' and 'In conclusion.' However, the transitions between sentences within paragraphs are sometimes mechanical, and the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the sentence 'it will resulst in the job market' is vague and lacks a clear connection to the preceding argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'economy,' 'online platforms,' and 'skilled workers.' However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'making life more easier' (a double comparative error) and 'contributing to that cause.' To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and academic vocabulary to demonstrate a wider range of lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. You have frequent errors in basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement ('science have already improved,' 'online work also have increased') and punctuation ('univeristy' s'). There are also spelling errors like 'curent' and 'resulst.' While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical rules and ensuring consistent verb forms will significantly improve your writing.

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