Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
in this period technology, many people are the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. In my opinion, i strongly agree with this notion and my opinion will be discussed in further paragraphs with a suitable conclusion.
Supporting my agreement to the given statement, I firmly believe that scientist discovries have improved healthcare. To cite an example medicines, vaccines and medical techonology help people live longer and healthier lives. Moreover science also makes daily life easier through technology.
Explaining some of the another supporting points in favour this statement, it is true that science can help solve problem such as climate change, food shortage, and lake of clean water. As a result our lives live longer because if science no implements of this technology our life ruinned fastely.In addition, new technology can make society safer and more sustainable. Therefore, scientifice research should focus on benefiting people.
In conclusion, re-state that science should primarily aim to improve people's lives while allowing scientist to explore new knowledge.however, even theortical research can improve eventually lead to discoveries that improve human life. I believe that a forementional points are strongly supporting my view points.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 194 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you clearly state your position in the introduction, the supporting arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient detail or specific examples. For instance, mentioning 'medicines' and 'vaccines' is a good start, but these points are not expanded upon to fully address the prompt. To improve, you must elaborate on your arguments with more depth and provide concrete, well-explained examples to ensure the task is fully addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'In addition,' but the transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed. The conclusion is also somewhat repetitive and does not effectively synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects logically to the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band score. There are several spelling errors, such as 'discovries,' 'techonology,' 'lake,' 'scientifice,' and 'theortical.' Additionally, some word choices are awkward, such as 'our life ruinned fastely.' To improve, you should focus on expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation. Using more precise terminology would help convey your ideas more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'in this period technology,' 'another supporting points in favour this statement,' and 'if science no implements of this technology.' Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms. Increasing the variety of complex structures while maintaining accuracy is essential for a higher score.
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