Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Over recent years, improvement in lives from science has become hotly debated topic in society. This matter is particularly significant de to its impact on stander of lives, influencing both individual and communities. while some people argue that its used for other proposes

I firmly believe that its used for more improvement in human lives . IN this essay i will present the reason supporting my viewpoint and address potential counterarguments.

some people believe that crucial aim of science to improve knowledge and discover new thing. because with the help of those we learn and knowing world. For instance before ten year a person made a discovery chanel with the help of those platform individuals know about all words animals and birds and in this platform a teacher told us about advantage and disadvantage of animals moreover about life of animals. Although this viewpoint may seem valid to some extent, i believe it overlook several key aspect. Another reason why people hold this believe it is used for defence of country. For instance it used for more strong and useful instruments for wars that is used in security of country. Nevertheless, these argument are not entirely convincing when weight against the broader implication.

One of main reason i support science should be improve people lives is that improve in health faculty. this is evident from made more strong medicine and improve the health center for basic need of lives. for instance many medicine are not availble in our country that made or import from outside with this help people live a stander life.

Another compelling reason why i believe that made our education system better as like Europe. In Pakistan people do not get education because of poor system in public school. science should be improve in our study strategy in this way science improve people life and more improvent in human facilities. Therefore it is clear that my opinion is well founded and supported by both evidence and reasoning.

in conclusion i believe that improvement in lives of people by science clearly is more important than other my reason and examplre also proved this thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether the main aim of science should be to improve people's lives, presenting arguments both for and against this view. A clear personal position is established in the introduction and maintained throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas suffers from a lack of clear explanation and overly simplistic or irrelevant examples. For instance, the mention of a 'discovery chanel' to explain how people learn about animals is underdeveloped and does not strongly connect to the core debate. Similarly, arguments regarding national defense and education are introduced but lack depth and precise supporting evidence. Consequently, the response fulfills the basic requirements of the task but remains at a Band 5 level due to limited and under-developed ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, showing an attempt at a standard essay structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, overall progression is limited by awkward transitions and confusing sentence sequencing. Cohesive devices are frequently misused, repetitive, or mechanically applied, such as the overuse of 'for instance' and 'another reason why'. Paragraphing is also erratic, with some sentences unhelpfully separated or lumped together. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical flow of arguments. These cohesion and organization flaws place the response firmly at a Band 5 level.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'stander of lives' instead of 'standard of living', 'de to' instead of 'due to', and 'health faculty' instead of 'healthcare sector'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'counterarguments' and 'implication', but these are often marred by spelling and morphological errors, such as 'improvent' and 'knowing world'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the general topic, the numerous inaccuracies in spelling and word formation restrict the score to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('science should be improve', 'this are not availble'), missing articles, and incorrect verb tenses ('before ten year a person made'). Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic, with lower-case letters used for the pronoun 'i' and at the beginnings of sentences in several instances. These errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, aligning the grammar with the Band 4 descriptors.

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