Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The most significant goal of science should be enhance people's lives . I firmly agree with this statement . now we discuss with more information.
In the 21st century , people expand their knowladge about how to link one to one person with world. As a result of that new inventions have become more popular in the world. Over the period of time scientists were doing experiments . Science is the foundation of the modern world. as a evolution of science new machines and philosophies were introduced by scientists. Smart phones, radios, televisions and compuuters, vehicles ,etc are essential things for people . these things make people's lives more easier. For instance , backthen people commute with other people from letters, face to face conversations . However that it change considerably due to science. Nowadays people can commute with others instantly through smart phones. They can find new friends within one second via facebook or any social media platforms .
Furthermore, not only that but also people have good career opportunities as science. for instance there are many jobs include health and engineering sectors. However some governments and scientists use science for earning more money without considering people's lives. They introduce new weapons and bombs to the world and it cause to the world wars .For instance hydrogen bombs are the most dangerous weapon nowadays. It can destroy whole island within one second.
In conclusion, science can destroy people's and improve people lives easier. however in my view they should improve people's lives
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The candidate addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position agreeing that the primary aim of science should be to improve people's lives. Main ideas are introduced, such as technological advancements in communication and career opportunities, alongside a counter-argument regarding weapons. However, the development of these ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. For instance, the transition to the discussion of weapons and warfare is abrupt and lacks deeper extension. While all parts of the task are addressed, the support remains basic and over-generalized in places, corresponding well to the Band 6 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays a basic overall arrangement with paragraphing used to separate the introduction, body points, and conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, such as 'now we discuss with more information' and 'furthermore, not only that but also'. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, and referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'they should improve people's lives' at the end without a clear antecedent). These features reflect the characteristics of Band 5, where organisation is present but progression is not always clear and cohesion is faulty.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate to convey the basic message, featuring common terms related to science, technology, and communication. However, there are noticeable limitations and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'knowladge', 'compuuters', and 'backthen'. The candidate attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'philosophies' and 'hydrogen bombs', but imprecise word choices and collocations persist (e.g., 'commute with other people from letters' instead of communicate). These errors occasionally cause slight hesitation for the reader, fitting the Band 5 descriptor profile.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues, such as missing capitalisation, incorrect tense usage ('that it change considerably'), and fragments or run-on sentences ('It can destroy whole island within one second'). While the meaning is usually retrievable, the frequency of errors in complex structures pulls the score to this level, matching the Band 5 criteria where frequent errors occur and attempts at complex structures are often faulty.
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