Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this contemporary era, science growing rapidly and achieving new milestone. Due to that, pivotal focus of science should be to enhanced everyone's lives. This essay will articulate the agreement of this notion.
To commence with the first agreement, science is improvising their technology and make new things in each sector. Then, why not enhancing the medical sector? To be more precise, not doubt that medical sector improvised their machinery, got better equipments, new surgeries are enable to cured disease. However, difference between the morbidity and mortality rates are imbalanced. For instance, curation of bone cancer can not be find by science, still scientists are working on it. Consequently, if it can not be cured, then it converted into severe disease and will be create a life-threatening situation for patient.
Another compelling point on agreement, short-term profit seeing by the majority companies. To elaborate further on this point, companies who conduct several researches in acute disease will give short-term result and give much profit. While, research on chronic diseases will take time and researcher have to spent more money on it. To exemplify, most of the researchers studying on acute disease like acute pulmonary embolism. They are not interested to studying on chronic diseases like bone cancer and HIV Aids. As a result, patients will be suffered from this kind of diseases.
To recapitulate, not only short-term evolution in medical sector, but long-term evolution also necessary for enhance people's lives. either it is about the good equipment and technology or about the research studies held by researchers for severe diseases.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether the main aim of science should be to improve people's lives, taking a clear stance in agreement. The ideas presented are relevant, focusing primarily on the medical sector, such as treatments for acute versus chronic diseases. However, the development of these ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, tending to over-generalize without fully extending the arguments with deep analysis. For instance, the discussion on companies prioritizing short-term profits for acute diseases touches on a valid point, but the explanation remains basic. There is a tendency for the argument to become slightly confused regarding how medical research directly connects to the broader philosophical prompt. Consequently, this performance aligns best with Band 6 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction and conclusion, and the text is divided into logical paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is frequently mechanical, awkward, or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To commence with the first agreement' and 'Another compelling point on agreement' sound unnatural and disrupt the flow of reading. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and transitional phrases do not always create smooth logical bridges between sentences, such as the abrupt shift in the second paragraph ('Then, why not enhancing the medical sector?'). Paragraphing is present and serves to separate main ideas, but overall cohesive management is faulty. Therefore, a Band 5.5 score is appropriate here.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The writer attempts to use a range of less common vocabulary, such as 'contemporary era', 'morbidity', 'mortality rates', and 'chronic diseases'. However, there are frequent word choice, collocation, and word formation errors throughout the text. Examples include 'science growing rapidly' (missing auxiliary verb/gerund form), 'to enhanced everyone's lives' (incorrect infinitive form), 'curation of bone cancer can not be find' (wrong lexical item and passive voice error), and 'researchers studying on acute disease' (incorrect preposition). While the vocabulary used is adequate to convey the general meaning, the persistent lexical inaccuracies place this firmly in the Band 5 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak. There are frequent, noticeable errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'science growing rapidly and achieving new milestone' (missing verb and pluralization error), 'new surgeries are enable to cured disease' (incorrect verb forms), and 'will be create a life-threatening situation' (double modal/verb error). Punctuation and article usage also show persistent issues. Because simple sentences are often error-free while complex attempts result in frequent grammatical mistakes, this performance merits a Band 5.0.
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