Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowdays the science improve alot and countiously show progess for the human development and build necessary life saving medicine and many more. I completely agree for this statement and give my opinion in the forthcoming paragarphs

To begin with,science help the human civilization and protect from the fatal diseases and help to invent lifesaving medicine which consequently improve and extend the human life. the science not only build or develop the medicine and other medical advancement but also support the daily and commutes services used by the people such as the invention of transportation cars bus and trains also the air travel which is covered by the aeroplanes which reduce the distances of thousand kilometre into just few hours just because of the help from science and technology.further complex surgeries and operations which easily available in every corner of the earth just because of science

Apart from this, the advancement with the help science also develop the devastation of human such as the wars among countries regulary use dangerous bombs and nuclear missiles which threathen the world and also fear among the people of the nations instead of using science for the destructiuon it should be used for development of better environment and maintains the world order.the use of advancement of science can solve environmental problem can be eradicate and help earth to reduce the pollution and develop the better life for human and other living beings

To conclude, the aim of the science should be for creation of better civilization and use of projects that leads to good development and not destruction of world and support people lifes and progess in sustainable ways

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by clearly stating a position agreeing with the statement that science should aim to improve people's lives. The student develops relevant ideas by discussing medical advancements, transportation, and touching upon the negative use of science in warfare and environmental protection. However, the development is somewhat generalized and lacks specific examples or well-extended arguments. For instance, points regarding medical and technological advancements are listed rather than fully explored. While all parts of the prompt are addressed, the depth of extension places this response comfortably at Band 6.0 according to the task response descriptors, as it presents a relevant position with some under-developed ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt at paragraphing, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the progression is hindered by frequent punctuation errors, missing capitalization, and a lack of cohesive devices. Sentences frequently run into one another without proper punctuation, making the logical relationships between ideas mechanical or unclear at times. For example, 'To begin with,science help the human civilization and protect from the fatal diseases' lacks smooth transitions, and referencing is occasionally weak. This level of cohesion and paragraphing aligns best with Band 5.0, as there is an organizational structure, but cohesive devices and punctuation are inadequate and inaccurate.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms such as 'civilization', 'advancement', 'transportation', and 'sustainable'. However, there are numerous noticeable errors in word formation, spelling, and word choice, such as 'Nowdays' instead of 'Nowadays', 'alot' instead of 'a lot', 'countiously' instead of 'continuously', and 'destructiuon'. These lexical errors and awkward collocations cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a limited ability to control less common vocabulary. Consequently, the lexical resource is characteristic of Band 5.0, where vocabulary is minimally adequate but marred by frequent spelling and word-choice errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the grammar is heavily compromised by frequent errors. There are widespread punctuation errors, missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and for proper nouns, and basic subject-verb agreement issues, such as 'science help' instead of 'science helps' and 'surgery and operations which easily available'. Many complex sentence attempts are faulty or run-on sentences. These frequent errors cause strain for the reader and prevent the text from reaching a higher band. The overall grammatical control and frequency of errors firmly place this performance at Band 5.0.

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