Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The primary purpose of science should be improving individuals' lives. I largely agree with this view, I belive science plays a defining role in making the life convenient by providing technological advancements and improving individuals' well-being.
Admittedly, science plays a crucial role in improving individuals lives by providing them with top-tier healthcare facilities. People in a contemporary society have instant access to all the healthcare services, they can comprehend what is getting wrong with their body and how they can treat it. For example, date back centuries, people did not know how to cure different diseases which is now possible due to the breakthrough advancements in scientific research. However, scientist are doing researches in every possible area to find the treatment of different health conditions to improve the life span of an individual.
On the other hand, science is also paramount in the field of technology as it is making day to day life more convenient. People nowadays have access to every facility owing to the cutting-edge technology. For instance, today people can communicate with a person living far off and can have face time within seconds, which was just a dream years ago but it is now feasible because of significant technological shift.
To conclude, science should aim to improve poeple's lives by improving their well-being provinding them with healthcare facilities, additionally by making the life more convenient through technology.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The candidate presents a clear position throughout the essay, largely agreeing that the primary purpose of science should be improving lives. Relevant ideas regarding healthcare and technological advancements are introduced and supported with examples, such as access to healthcare facilities and face-to-face communication technology. However, the response fails to meet the minimum length requirement, containing only 231 words instead of the required 250 words. This under-length impacts the full development of ideas, leading to a penalty under Task Achievement. Consequently, the score is restricted to Band 5.5, as the task is addressed only partially due to the length shortfall.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, dividing the introduction, body paragraphs on healthcare and technology, and the conclusion. Logical transitions are attempted, such as 'Admittedly,' and 'On the other hand,' which help guide the reader through the arguments. However, cohesion is occasionally faulty or mechanical, as seen in comma splices ('People in a contemporary society have instant access to all the healthcare services, they can comprehend...') and minor referencing issues. Overall organisation is present, but progression can feel somewhat formulaic, leading to a Band 6.0 rating for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The candidate demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, successfully incorporating terms like 'contemporary society,' 'breakthrough advancements,' 'cutting-edge technology,' and 'feasible.' However, there are noticeable word choice errors, spelling mistakes, and awkward collocations throughout the text, such as 'making the life convenient' instead of 'making life convenient,' 'date back centuries' instead of 'centuries ago,' and 'scientist are doing researches' instead of 'scientists are conducting research' (along with spelling slips like 'belive' and 'poeple'). These minor lexical inaccuracies do not seriously impede communication, placing the response firmly at Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and subordinate structures such as 'which was just a dream years ago but it is now feasible because of significant technological shift.' However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in article usage, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation, including comma splices and run-on sentences in the conclusion ('provinding them with healthcare facilities, additionally by making the life...'). Because errors occur regularly alongside a limited variety of complex structures that often contain flaws, the appropriate score for Grammatical Range and Accuracy is Band 5.0.
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